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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at international level. v. 2
More and more countries all around the world are facing drastic environmental problems. In my opinion I believe that the protection of the environment not on lies at the macro level but should be an individual level too. It is a fact that we cannot deny the role that governments and organisations play to protect the green of our world. In other words, at a macro level it is the government who spends on resources to diminish the pollution world-wide which an individual can not afford. Also, governmental bodies from all around the world decide and conduct meetings in order to impose laws on certain pollutions. For example, governments all over agree to fine taxes on the industries for releasing harmful exhausts or wastes in the atmosphere or water bodies so consequently air and water pollution could be minimised. However, considering everything at the international level, individuals themselves should not forget to play their part and spread the trend surrounding them to get our environment pollution free. Firstly, for example, if a person turns off the lights when unnecessarily used can save us a little energy, and believing every person making this small effort would help us to a greater extent. Secondly, if customers stop buying plastic packaged food, stores and supermarkets will consider using other form of packaging which could be renewed and do not add to causing more pollution. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is not only the governments duty but individuals also play an important role to protect the environment as a whole. By acting as soon as possible, we can secure the future for our next generation.
More and more countries all around the world are facing drastic environmental problems. In my opinion I believe that the protection of the environment not on lies at the macro
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level
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should be an
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individual
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level
too.

It is a fact that we cannot deny the role that
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governments
and
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organisations
play to protect the green of our world.
In other words
, at a macro
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level
it is the
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government
who spends on resources to diminish the
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pollution
world-wide which an
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individual
can not afford.
Also
, governmental bodies from all around the world decide and conduct meetings in order to impose laws on certain
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pollutions
.
For example
,
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governments
all over
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agree
to fine taxes on the industries for releasing harmful exhausts or wastes in the atmosphere or water bodies
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so
consequently
air and water
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pollution
could be
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minimised
.

However
, considering everything at the international
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level
,
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individuals
themselves should not forget to play their part and spread the trend surrounding them to
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get
our environment
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pollution
free.
Firstly
,
for example
, if a person turns off the lights when
unnecessarily
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used
can save us a
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little
energy, and believing every person making this
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small
effort would
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help
us to a greater extent.
Secondly
, if customers
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stop
buying plastic packaged food, stores and supermarkets will consider using other form of packaging which could
be renewed
and do not
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add
to causing more pollution.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that it is not
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only
the
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governments
duty
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but
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individuals
also
play an
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important
role to protect the environment as a whole. By acting as
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soon
as possible, we can secure the future for our
next
generation.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at international level. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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