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Due to the development rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business people are unable to compete

Due to the development rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business people are unable to compete anbX
The development of supermarkets in some countries affected so many local businesses people. And people also willing to buy from supermarkets. Many governments sign the projects for foreign investment for this action local business people in suffer. And most importantly supermarkets price also higher, they will charge for all allowances and taxes as well as fixed prices. Most importantly once you entered to supermarkets unwontedly we will buy be cause of attractive advertisements and colorful packets it will waste of money. But if you take local business people they will connected to your family, as well as you can bargain for price's one more thing you won’t waste your money. In my conclusion government should encourage local business people for doing business.
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governments
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supermarkets price
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local
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as you can bargain for price's one more thing you won’t waste your money. In my conclusion
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IELTS essay Due to the development rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business people are unable to compete

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
122 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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