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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child developed better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child developed better skills and more creativity than reading. BX7V
It is an irrefutable fact that today children are the policy maker of future. However, in the modern era, children able to learn more things by doing enjoyable activities with their guardians. personally, I completely agree with this statement and articulate my points in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the prominent reason why juveniles learn easily from leisure time activities is that it is effective method for kids learning because children give preference to relaxation activities more rather than sitting in room and reading curriculum and story books. In other words, assist to boost their mental as well as physical ability. For example, survey was conducted which showed that those children who indulge into recreational activities with their progenitors have more thinking and. Creative level as compared to other children. As a result, learning through entertainment methods assist children to improve their skills and enhance creativity. Moving further, another reason behind this is children straightforwardly acquire new knowledge through visualisation methodb. Owing to the fact that, there is not scientific research which showed that reading is essential for juveniles bin their teenage, however reserve statement is true. In other words, school going children learn through visual method like 3D shows, educational electronic games and so on. To exemplify, one research report illustrated that who learn with activity A-Z in visualisation mode are acquire information easily as compared to those students who gain through theoretical method. Hence, 3D classes give benefit to children for long Lasting. In conclusion, I still like to reiterate my views that while doing recreational activity with a children can help to develop their educational knowledge as well as creativity level, because nowadays, mostly students give attention to visualisation ways and entertainment activities instead of reading.
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today
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children
are the
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policy maker
of future.
However
, in the modern era,
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children
able to
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learn
more things by doing enjoyable
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activities
with their guardians.
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personally
, I completely
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agree
with this statement and articulate my points in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the prominent reason why juveniles
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learn
easily
from leisure time
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activities
is that it is effective
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method
for kids learning
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because
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children
give preference to relaxation
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activities
more
rather
than sitting in room and reading curriculum and story books.
In other words
, assist to boost their mental
as well
as physical ability.
For example
, survey
was conducted
which
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showed
that those
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children
who indulge into recreational
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activities
with their progenitors have more thinking and. Creative level as compared to other
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children
.
As a result
, learning
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through
entertainment
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methods
assist
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children
to
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improve
their
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skills
and enhance creativity. Moving
further
, another reason behind this is
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children
straightforwardly
acquire new knowledge
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through
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visualisation
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methodb
. Owing to the fact that, there is not scientific research which
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showed
that reading is essential for juveniles bin their teenage,
however
reserve statement is true.
In other words
, school going
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children
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learn
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through
visual
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method
like 3D
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shows
, educational electronic games and
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so
on. To exemplify, one research report illustrated that who
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learn
with
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activity
A-Z in
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visualisation
mode are
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acquire
information
easily
as compared to those students who gain
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through
theoretical
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method
.
Hence
, 3D classes give benefit to
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children
for long Lasting.
In conclusion
, I
still
like to reiterate my views that while doing recreational
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activity
with a
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children
can
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help
to develop their educational knowledge
as well
as creativity level,
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because
nowadays,
mostly
students give attention to
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visualisation
ways and entertainment
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activities
instead
of reading.
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IELTS essay Doing an enjoyable activity with a child developed better skills and more creativity than reading.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
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