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doctor recommended that older people could get regular exercise however many older people do not exercise enough but can be done to encourage them to exercise

doctor recommended that older people could get regular exercise however many older people do not exercise enough but can be done to encourage them to exercise EBgB
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IELTS essay doctor recommended that older people could get regular exercise however many older people do not exercise enough but can be done to encourage them to exercise

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
72 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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