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Do Governments have a legitimate role in protecting citizens from the harmful effects of their own decisions to smoke or are such decisions up to an individual?

Do Governments have a legitimate role in protecting citizens from the harmful effects of their own decisions to smoke or are such decisions up to an individual? MMLd9
It is argued that governments should take the ownership or an individual responsibility to cut the detrimental effects of Tobacco consumption on general public. This essay agrees that the government should have a legitimate role to protect the citizens. This essay will first discuss on the the role of the goverment and then explain the role of individual as well. Government has the power to curb the perils of smoking by raising the prices of cigarettes and other tobacco products. Apart from this, they can also ensure the manufactures to print the graphic content on the packs of tobacco products to bring the awareness to the public on harmful effects that smoking can bring. To implement these two techniques supreme power is essential and, obviously, general public do not have any to control. For instance, a study conducted by the Melbourne University in March 2018 found that after increment of prices along with the graphic content has reduced the smokers percentage by 30. The government can also make a law to ban smoking in public places. This act can reduce the harmful effects as the law always comes with a penalty if one breaks it. It also enforces the smokers to use a designated area, such as smoking area, and avoid releasing harmful smoke into the climate which can impact public health. However, these techniques can be implemented with the support of citizens which shows that an individual's role is imperative. For instance, The New York Times published last year that banning public smoking indeed improvised the air quality in denced metros such as New York. In conclusion, governments should take an active role and take proactive actions to curb the detribmental effects of tobacco consumption along with the public support.
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is argued
that
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governments
should take the ownership or an individual responsibility to
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cut
the detrimental effects of
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Tobacco
consumption on general
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public
. This essay
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agrees
that the
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government
should have a legitimate
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role
to protect the citizens. This essay will
first
discuss on
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role
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goverment
and then
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explain
the
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role
of individual
as well
.

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Government
has the power to curb the perils of
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smoking
by raising the prices of cigarettes and other
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tobacco
products. Apart from this, they can
also
ensure the manufactures to print the graphic content on the packs of
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tobacco
products to bring the awareness to the
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public
on harmful effects that
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smoking
can bring. To implement these two techniques supreme power is essential and,
obviously
, general
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public
do not have any to control.
For instance
, a study conducted by the Melbourne University in March 2018 found that after increment of prices along with the graphic content has
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reduced
the
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smokers
percentage by 30.

The
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government
can
also
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make
a law to ban
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smoking
in
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public
places. This act can
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reduce
the harmful effects as the law always
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comes
with a penalty if one breaks it. It
also
enforces the smokers to
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use
a designated area, such as
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smoking
area, and avoid releasing harmful smoke into the climate which can impact
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public
health.
However
, these techniques can
be implemented
with the support of citizens which
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shows
that an individual's
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role
is imperative.
For instance
, The New York Times published last year that banning
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public
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smoking
indeed
improvised the air quality in
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denced
metros such as New York.

In conclusion
,
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governments
should take an active
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role
and take proactive actions to curb the
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detribmental
effects of
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tobacco
consumption along with the
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public
support.
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IELTS essay Do Governments have a legitimate role in protecting citizens from the harmful effects of their own decisions to smoke or are such decisions up to an individual?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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