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Digital communication technology, such as email. instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.3

Digital communication technology, such as email. instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. with this opinion? v. 3
Although, advances in technology have made it easier for people to communicate around the globe, but it does not make better relations among them. I think, modern technological inventions have positive effects, but people have made it negative, because they do not use it in an appropriate way. To begin with, the most predominant benefit is people can communicate with each other all the globe, they just need to push the button and connect with them. For example, In traditional time people used to write letters, then they wait for response for months and sometime these telegrams missed and did not reach at a person to whom it concern. In today's era, people can connect with each other not only through phone in fact different internet applications are available, even with the help of that they can see each other. Moreover, before the existence of the internet people can not update their routine activities on social media, but now this is possible and they can up-to-date everything and share their experience with friends, family and relatives. However, the main concern is rising due to the advance inventions is people are going away from one another in the real world. In fact, science made it for positive results and people are addicted of social media. Now it is visible that on social media people have thousands of friends in virtual world, but they do not know about them in reality. Even do not meet each other, just waste their productive time, When communication devices were not existing, then people were more close and share their problems and also, assist who was in need, but now it is expiring due to wrong use of these. In conclusion, while scientists make these devices to improve relations among people, but when one does not use these in a good way, then negative concerns take birth.
Although, advances in technology have made it easier for
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make
better relations among them. I
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think
, modern technological inventions have
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positive
effects,
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but
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people
have made it
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negative
,
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because
they do not
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use
it
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in an appropriate way
.

To
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begin
with, the most predominant benefit is
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people
can communicate with each
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other
all the globe, they
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just
need to push the button and connect with them.
For example
, In traditional time
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people
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used
to write letters, then they wait for response for months and sometime these telegrams missed and did not reach at a person to whom it
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concern
. In
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today
's era,
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people
can connect with each
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other
not
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only
through phone in fact
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different
internet applications are available, even with the
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help
of that they can
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see
each
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other
.
Moreover
,
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before
the existence of the internet
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people
can not update their routine activities on social media,
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but
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now
this is
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can up-to-date
everything and share their experience with friends, family and relatives.

However
, the main concern is rising due to the advance inventions is
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people
are going away from one another in the real world. In fact, science made it for
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positive
results and
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people
are addicted
of social media.
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Now
it is visible that on social media
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people
have thousands of friends in virtual world,
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but
they do not know about them in reality. Even do not
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meet
each
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other
,
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just
waste their productive time, When communication devices were not existing, then
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people
were more close and share their problems and
also
, assist who was in need,
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but
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now
it is expiring due to
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wrong
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use
of these.

In conclusion
, while scientists
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make
these devices to
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improve
relations among
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people
,
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but
when one does not
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use
these in a
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good
way, then
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concerns take birth.
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IELTS essay Digital communication technology, such as email. instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. with this opinion? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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