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Describe your financial profile

I am currently doing my Intermediate 2nd year (12th grade). I ll be done with it by the month of April. But financially we can't see much further. My Dad's job was the only source of income that we had. My mom is a housewife and I have two other siblings. Both of them go to the same school that I went to. We are unable to save money due to the number of primary expenses that we have and also due to the very limited salary that my father earned. Moreover, we don't have any assets or property on our name. We are living in a rented house. The pandemic made it even more rough for us financially. My dad lost his job and he has been jobless for seven straight months. And even now he is still searching for a job. In this period of time, we have got quite a few loans on our head. Ultimately making it even more rough for us. As of now, we can only spend money on the basic necessities. In conclusion, I cannot afford to study abroad without a scholarship. Being able to apply for a scholarship at a prestigious University gave us hope.
I am
currently
doing my Intermediate 2nd year (12th grade).
I ll
be done
with it by the month of April.
But
financially
we can't
see
much
further
. My Dad's job was the
only
source of income that we had. My mom is a housewife and I have two other siblings. Both of them go to the same school that I went to. We are unable to save money due to the number of primary expenses that we have and
also
due to the
very
limited salary that my father earned.

Moreover
, we don't have any assets or property on our name. We are living in a rented
house
. The pandemic made it even more rough for us
financially
. My dad lost his
job and
he has been jobless for seven straight months. And even
now
he is
still
searching for a job. In this period of time, we have
got
quite a few loans on our head.
Ultimately
making it even more rough for us. As of
now
, we can
only
spend money on the
basic necessities
.

In conclusion
, I cannot afford to study abroad without a scholarship. Being able to apply for a scholarship at a prestigious University gave us hope.
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IELTS essay Describe your financial profile

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
203 words
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