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Describe a time when you had some medicine ?

Describe a time when you had some medicine? VBg5O
It is commonly said that prevention is better than cure. although o believe in idea of prevention, there are still some affliction which can not be prevented because they strike unannounced for such eilments be have medicines I agree that supplement are greatest invention of mankind. pills in power us to fight many threats which could be otherwise debilitating for us I can personally bouch for it since recently I went throw one such harrowing experience I vividly remember it was the time of January 1000 people suffered these stone pain and 3 years ago I was one of the unfortunate victim. it started when me and my family about to sleep I suffered from unbearable pain so my family took may to the hospital due to night doctor were unable to treat me but nurses at night shift treated me. hospital staff injected the injection to bring pain in under control after that they put Ivdrip in my nerves
It is
commonly
said that prevention is better than cure.
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although
o believe in
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idea
of prevention, there are
still
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some
affliction which can not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
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because
they strike unannounced for such
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eilments
be have medicines I
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agree
that supplement are
A determiner is probably missing here: "the greatest".
greatest
invention of mankind.
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pills
in power us to fight
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many
threats which could be
otherwise
debilitating for us I can
personally
bouch for it since recently I went throw one such harrowing experience I
vividly
remember it was the time of January 1000
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people
suffered these stone pain and 3 years ago I was one of the unfortunate victim.
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it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
when me and my family about to sleep I suffered from unbearable pain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
my family took may to the hospital due to night doctor were unable to treat me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
nurses at night shift treated me. hospital staff injected the injection to bring pain in under control after that they put
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ivdrip
in my
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nerves

IELTS essay Describe a time when you had some medicine?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
159 words
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4.0
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