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Children these days spend a lot of time apart from their parents because in many homes both parents work

Children these days spend a lot of time apart from their parents because in many homes both parents work pJxo3
It is a common belief that children spend a lot of time apart from their parents because in many households, both parents have to work far from homes. While this is a serious problem, it can be solved by creating after-chool socializing activities to improve children’s skills. My essay below will analyze both causes and workable solutions to this problem. Many problems can happen when parents work far away and don’t have enough time to take care of their children. One of the main problems is that those children will be severely affected mentally. For children whose parents work far away, they will have less contact and attention their parents. Therefore, children may be lack of family bonding and parents’ emotions since their parents don’t have enough to take care of them and help them solve life’s problems. In fact, in recent a survey conducted in Ho Chi Minh City, over 55 percent of children suffer from depression and loneliness because their parents are work far away. So when difficulties araise, they can’t share it to anyone but have to endure it which can easily lead to psychological problem. There are a number of viable solutions to help tackle this problem. One of the ways is that school should establish more facilities and after-school programs for those children. This is a best opportunities to enhance their social skills. When children take part in these activities, they can get some skills about taking care of themselves as well as solve problems when their parents cannot be with them. With these activities, children can develop essential life skills. In some developed countries like Korea, Korean parents usually send their children to after-school program to ensure their children have enough skills when they are not at home. In conclusion, although many problems has been caused and affect children when parents work far from homes, there are still many measures of skills education to solve it.
It is a common belief that
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children
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a lot of
time apart from their
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parents
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because
in
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many
households, both
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parents
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have to
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work
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far
from homes. While this is a serious
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problem
, it can
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by creating
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after-chool
socializing activities to
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improve
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children’s
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skills
. My essay below will analyze both causes and
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workable
solutions to this problem.

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Many
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problems
can happen when
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parents
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work
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far
away and don’t have
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enough
time to take care of their
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children
. One of the main
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problems
is that those
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children
will be
severely
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affected
mentally. For
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children
whose
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parents
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work
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far
away, they will have less contact and attention their
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parents
.
Therefore
,
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children
may be lack of family bonding and
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parents’
emotions since their
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parents
don’t have
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enough
to take care of them and
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help
them solve life’s
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problems
. In fact, in recent a survey conducted in Ho Chi Minh City, over 55 percent of
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children
suffer from depression and loneliness
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because
their
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parents
are
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work
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far
away.
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So
when difficulties
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araise
, they can’t share it to anyone
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but
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have to
endure it which can
easily
lead to psychological problem.

There are a number of viable solutions to
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help
tackle this
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problem
. One of the ways is that school should establish more facilities and after-school programs for those
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children
. This is
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a
best opportunities to enhance their social
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skills
. When
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children
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take part
in these activities, they can
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get
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some
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skills
about taking care of themselves
as well
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problems
when their
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parents
cannot be with them. With these activities,
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children
can develop essential life
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skills
. In
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some
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developed countries
like Korea, Korean
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parents
usually
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send
their
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children
to after-school program to ensure their
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children
have
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enough
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skills
when they are not at home.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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problems
has
been caused
and affect
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children
when
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parents
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work
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far
from homes, there are
still
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many
measures of
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skills
education to solve it.
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IELTS essay Children these days spend a lot of time apart from their parents because in many homes both parents work

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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