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Children from some parts of the world have less responsibilities than the others in the past. Some people think it as a positive development and others think it as a negative development. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Children from some parts of the world have less responsibilities than the others in the past. Some people think it as a positive development and others think it as a negative development. MjVk
A section of the society believes that the children at some parts of the world possess minimal responsibilities and consider it as an advantageous trend. I completely disagree with this notion since I believe that the young people holding lesser responsibilities could create negative impacts on the holistic development of the society. A few decades before, younger generations were more responsible in terms of education, financial status, relationship, career and environment. They seem concerned about all the factors that are associated with their personal well-being. A recent study conducted by the Harvard University shows that, countries such as Ireland and Korea are economically preceding their competent countries as a result of the responsible attitude of it's citizens, especially the teenagers and adults. But, in the recent times, teenage people at certain parts of the world are becoming increasingly irresponsible, which threatens the development of society. However, there are a few who admit this as a beneficial occurrence without visualizing the detrimental effects that are linked with it. For example, if a massive number of school students who are not concerned about their education will lead to an increase in illiterate percentage, which would've eventually obstruct the literacy rate of the country. This, in fact, could negatively influence the country's economic development. To conclude, in line with the views presented above, it is evident that the teenagers who are least concerned, in some countries of the world could cause adverse effects on their personal and societal well being and I reiterate that these younger people should hold greater responsibilities to enhance themselves as well as the society.
A section of the society believes that the children at
some
parts of the world possess minimal responsibilities and consider it as an advantageous trend. I completely disagree with this notion since I believe that the young
people
holding lesser responsibilities could create
negative
impacts on the holistic development of the society.

A few decades
before
, younger generations were more responsible in terms of education, financial status, relationship, career and environment. They seem concerned about all the factors that
are associated
with their personal well-being. A recent study conducted by the Harvard University
shows
that,
countries
such as Ireland and Korea are
economically
preceding their competent
countries
as a result
of the responsible attitude
of it's citizens
,
especially
the
teenagers
and adults.

But
, in the recent times, teenage
people
at certain parts of the world are becoming
increasingly
irresponsible, which threatens the development of society.
However
, there are a few who admit this as a beneficial occurrence without visualizing the detrimental effects that
are linked
with it.
For example
, if a massive number of school students who are not concerned about their education will lead to an increase in illiterate percentage, which would've
eventually
obstruct the literacy rate of the
country
. This, in fact, could
negatively
influence the country's economic development.

To conclude
, in line with the views presented above, it is evident that the
teenagers
who are least concerned, in
some
countries
of the world could cause adverse effects on their personal and societal
well being
and I reiterate that these younger
people
should hold greater responsibilities to enhance themselves
as well
as the society.
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IELTS essay Children from some parts of the world have less responsibilities than the others in the past. Some people think it as a positive development and others think it as a negative development.

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