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Children are the backbone of every country.

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Children are the backbone of every country. So, there are people who tend to believe that youngsters should be encouraged to initiate social work as it will results in flourished society and individualistic growth of youngsters themselves. I, too believe that this motivation has more benefits than its drawbacks. IELTS WRITING TASK 2 QUESTIONSTo begin with, social work by children can be easily associated with personality development because during this drive, they tend to communicate with variety of people, leads to polished verbal skills. For example, if they start convincing rural people to send their children in school they have to be such a convincing attitude along with developed verbal skills to deal with diverse kind of people there. This improved skill will help them lifelong in every arena. Apart from this, the true values of life like tolerance, patience, team spirit, cooperation can be learnt. Besides that, young mind serve the country with full enthusiasm that gives them feeling of fulfillment and self satisfaction. This worthiness for themselves brim them with self confidence and patriotic feeling. Moreover, going and experiencing multiple culture and tradition make their horizon so broad that add one more feather in their cap. However, It is truly said, no rose without thrones. Can the drawbacks of this initiation be ignored? Children go to school, participate indifferent curriculum activities, endure the pressure of peers, parents, and teachers and in competitive world they should not be expected to serve society without their self benefits. This kind of pressure might bring resentment in their mind. In conclusion I believe, notion of teenager doing unpaid work is indeed good but proper monitoring and care should be given to avoid untoward consequences.
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are the backbone of every country.
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, there are
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people
who tend to believe that youngsters should
be encouraged
to initiate social work as it will
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results
in flourished society and individualistic growth of youngsters themselves. I,
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that this motivation has more benefits than its drawbacks.

IELTS WRITING TASK 2
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QUESTIONSTo
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children
can be
easily
associated with personality development
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because
during this drive, they tend to communicate with variety of
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people
, leads to polished verbal
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skills
.
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, if they
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start
convincing rural
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people
to
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send
their
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children
in school they
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have to
be such a convincing attitude along with developed verbal
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skills
to deal with diverse kind of
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people
there. This
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improved
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skill
will
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help
them lifelong in every arena. Apart from this, the true values of life like tolerance, patience, team spirit, cooperation can be
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that, young mind serve the country with full enthusiasm that gives them feeling of fulfillment and
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self satisfaction
. This worthiness for themselves brim them with
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self confidence
and patriotic feeling.
Moreover
, going and experiencing multiple culture and tradition
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make
their horizon
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so
broad that
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add
one more feather in their cap.

However
, It is
truly
said, no rose without thrones. Can the drawbacks of this initiation be
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ignored
?
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Children
go to school, participate indifferent curriculum activities, endure the pressure of peers, parents, and teachers and in competitive world they should not be
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expected
to serve society without their self benefits. This kind of pressure might bring resentment in their mind.

In
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conclusion I
believe, notion of
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teenager
doing unpaid work is
indeed
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good
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but
proper monitoring and care should be
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given
to avoid untoward consequences.
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IELTS essay Children are the backbone of every country.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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