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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience 0oA1
Previously people could not even think of buying things online. However, today it’s no longer a dream. These days online shopping is becoming more and more popular. Some people think that going shopping is more reasonable as far as online shopping faces a lot of risks. I personally believe that we can save time, energy and money buying things online benefits of online shopping significantly exceed disadvantages. Firstly, it is now possible to purchase anything from clothing, shoes, and other goods online with one click from any place and time of your convenience. In this fast-paced world purchasing goods online saves time, energy, and transportation cost. Researches held in Britain show that from 2019 to 2020 number of online shopping has significantly increased by 18% that is strong evidence that people prefer buying things online. From my experience, I used to buy shoes (nebismieri) at the virtual shop, which was cheaper compared to some shops near my house. Moreover, during quarantine online shopping was the only option for people to get necessary things. Secondly, when we try to economize resources preventing ourselves form going out the environment benefits from that. During quarantine after decreasing traffic by 71% automatically reflected on climate. Some people say that online shopping is not good for health. Also shopping is a relaxing activity that improves overall mood. However, I strongly believe that spending time and energy on shopping around is really tiresome. I prefer to stay indoors. To conclude, online shopping successfully changed our lives making every day more convenient and easier in obtaining almost anything we can want as a customer. In addition, the communication built by online services, websites and social medias gives customers better relationships with the business and high fulfilment of needs.
Previously
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people
could not even
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think
of buying things
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online
.
However
,
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today
it’s no longer a dream. These days
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online
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shopping
is becoming more and more popular.
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Some
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people
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think
that going
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shopping
is more reasonable as far as
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online
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shopping
faces
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a lot of
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risks
. I
personally
believe that we can save
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time
, energy and money buying things
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online
benefits of
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online
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shopping
significantly
exceed disadvantages.

Firstly
, it is
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now
possible to
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purchase
anything from clothing, shoes, and other
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goods
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online
with one click from any place and
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time
of your convenience. In this
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fast
-paced world purchasing
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goods
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online
saves
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time
, energy, and transportation cost. Researches held in Britain
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show
that from 2019 to 2020 number of
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online
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shopping
has
significantly
increased by 18%
that is
strong evidence that
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people
prefer buying things
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online
. From my experience, I
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used
to
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buy
shoes (
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nebismieri
) at the virtual shop, which was cheaper compared to
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some
shops near my
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house
.
Moreover
, during quarantine
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online
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shopping
was the
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only
option for
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people
to
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get
necessary things.

Secondly
, when we try to economize resources preventing ourselves form going out the environment benefits from that. During quarantine after decreasing traffic by 71%
automatically
reflected on climate.
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Some
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people
say that
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online
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shopping
is not
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good
for health.
Also
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shopping
is a relaxing activity that
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improves
overall
mood.
However
, I
strongly
believe that spending
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time
and energy on
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shopping
around is
really
tiresome. I prefer to stay indoors.

To conclude
,
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online
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shopping
successfully
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changed
our
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lives
making every day more convenient and easier in obtaining almost anything we can want as a customer.
In addition
, the communication built by
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online
services, websites and social medias gives customers better relationships with the business and high
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fulfilment
of needs.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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