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In today's era, everyone is showing their interest towards different art and music forms like, dancing, playing instruments, painting to release stress from their daily hectic schedule. Technology has helped them by providing guidance towards learning new arts. One can easily access any video from internet and start to acquire knowledge of musically instruments. In my opinion, these play an important role both in youngsters life as well as elder people's life who have passion towards these arts and music forms. First of all, we are living in increasingly stressful world. With increase in technology, new jobs are created which lead to growth of stress in our lives. Art and music play an vital role in relaxing and calming your body and mind. After an hectic day one can just listen to smooth songs or paint on a canvas. Another thing is music and art helps to increase creativeness. One with interest in art and music will have more productivity than the one without. Lastly, it also unites people with similar interests. For example, in a live concert thousands of people gather to listen to songs sing by singers.
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forms like, dancing, playing instruments, painting to release
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from their daily hectic schedule. Technology has
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them by providing guidance towards learning new
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arts
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access any video from internet and
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instruments. In my opinion, these play an
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an
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listen to smooth songs or paint on a canvas. Another thing is
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and
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art
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helps
to increase creativeness. One with interest in
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art
and
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music
will have more productivity than the one without.
Lastly
, it
also
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people
with similar interests.
For example
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concert thousands of
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gather to listen to songs sing by singers.
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Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
189 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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