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As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Take a stand and build up your argument.

As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. Take a stand and build up your argument. QjaP
Globalization – a topic of heated argument, with as many likes, as its dislike. Both like and dislike have their own requisites and measures. Globalization has its own importance in terms of economic development and race for power. But it’s not always welcomed by those who love to keep up our culture and dignity. People adapting to the western culture does not necessarily mean getting away with their civilization. Every culture has its good and bad virtues. It is completely on an individual whether what to absorb and take into practises in life. The point of utmost importance is not to betray our own culture, by flowing away with the glittering charm of other society and culture. Talking of the positive attitudes for the globalization, it has a deep rooted stand in economic growth of the nation. The growing trans-communication in different ways viz. tele-communications like Internet, emails, calls and video-calling, chats, along with the advancement in the various routes of transportation have made the world come closer. The families could easily interact and converse with their children abroad. We can know the latest day-to-day advancements in technology and keep up with the pace of the world. Our people have very well grown up with the inter-personal skills, much confident to go hand-in-hand with anyone from any part of the world. India has its own charm, as nowhere in the world has the tradition of joint families, the affection and bonding within the relationships /families has always a stand in the world. The respect to the women and the way of handling the physical relationship with immense respect and integrity has been a beauty among us Indians. The vivid culture, language, traditions, right from the dance forms to the food ingredients and delicacies, all within the same country and everyone marching in a united way to portraying themselves as one unit India, is always amazing and astonishing feature for everyone outside our country. Still, when we go to the dark aspect of this globalization, it has blinded our youth regarding our own richness of culture. Our nation which had always been an ever-shining star for its rich culture and civilization, is now facing a downfall due to the import of westernization into our culture. Globalisation has helped us to cope up with the advancing science, but where on earth has our emotions and bonding gone? Youth today is just concentrating to top the financial market; they don’t have time to spend with their family, kids for whom they are striving hard day and night. We have forgotten that money can get us anything, but not the true love and innocence. We have engrossed ourselves to the technology to the extent that we are failing to respect the relationship. Charm of glittering designation and gadgets have faded the importance of the elders in the family. We don’t realize dis-respecting elderly people in the fake prestige of technology and ego of being literate. All this is nothing but the blackened gift to us by the globalization. It’s not only the globalization but the blinded youth brains that is digging our culture. We have false ego to project, but lack a wise brain to implement it for the betterment of our economy, promoting the agricultural sector and rural class. Our focus is just to gain a good word from the mouth of the foreigner, though we are receiving continuous criticism from our own men. We have failed to respect the unity in diversity, projecting different rallies and demanding own region to be split further. Where has the unity gone, why are we seeking a split in our states? Last but definitely not the least is the status of women in Indian society today. We have not only blackened our face within our own nation but worldwide, by dis-respecting and assaulting women from different countries, who have visited India with the faith of gaining respect. Women have been downtrodden and today women lack safety in their own country. What else can be more shameful than this? Thinking deeply makes us realize that it’s we who have permitted pubs, disco, night outs so openly, and the liberty is being misused now. These aspects of globalization definitely need to be blacklisted at the earliest. It’s the need of hour; we need to realize this high time and start educating our children right from the childhood the art of deriving good virtues, thereby maintaining our own uniqueness. Let’s join hands to save our nation and culture from getting destructed.
Globalization
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–
a topic of heated argument, with as
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many
likes, as its dislike. Both like and dislike have their
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own
requisites and measures. Globalization has its
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own
importance in terms of economic development and race for power.
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But
it’s not always welcomed by those who
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love
to
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keep
up our
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culture
and dignity.

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People
adapting to the western
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culture
does not
necessarily
mean getting away with their civilization. Every
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culture
has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and
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bad
virtues. It is completely on an individual whether what to absorb and take into
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practises
in life. The point of utmost importance is not to betray our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
, by flowing away with the glittering charm of other society and culture.

Talking of the
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positive
attitudes for the globalization, it has a
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deep rooted
stand in economic growth of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
. The growing trans-communication in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
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ways
viz.
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tele-communications
like Internet, emails, calls and video-calling, chats, along with the advancement in the various routes of transportation have made the
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world
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come
closer. The
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families
could
easily
interact and converse with their children abroad. We can know the latest day-to-day advancements in technology and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up with the pace of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. Our
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people
have
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very
well grown up with the inter-personal
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skills
, much confident to go hand-in-hand with anyone from any part of the world.

India has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
charm, as nowhere in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
has the tradition of joint
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
, the affection and bonding within the relationships /families has always a stand in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
respect
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
and the way of handling the physical relationship with immense
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
respect
and integrity has been a beauty among us Indians. The vivid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
, language, traditions, right from the dance forms to the food ingredients and delicacies, all within the same country and everyone marching in a united way to portraying themselves as one unit India, is always amazing and astonishing feature for everyone outside our country.

Still
, when we go to the dark aspect of this globalization, it has blinded our youth regarding our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
richness of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
. Our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
which had always been an ever-shining star for its rich
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culture
and civilization, is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
facing a downfall due to the import of
Possible incorrect capitalization. Some nouns that are derived from proper nouns can have both an initial capital letter and an initial lower case letter. If there is a close association with the proper noun, use "Westernization".
westernization
into our
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culture
.
Do not mix variants of the same word ('globalisation' and 'globalization') within a single text.
Globalisation
has
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helped
us to cope up with the advancing science,
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but
where on earth has our emotions and bonding gone?

Youth
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today
is
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just
concentrating to top the financial market; they don’t have time to spend with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
, kids for whom they are striving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
day and night. We have forgotten that money can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
us anything,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not the true
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and innocence. We have engrossed ourselves to the technology to the extent that we are failing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
respect
the relationship. Charm of glittering designation and gadgets have faded the importance of the elders in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
. We don’t realize dis-respecting elderly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the fake prestige of technology and ego of being literate. All this is nothing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the blackened gift to us by the globalization.

It’s not
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only
the globalization
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but
the blinded youth brains
that is
digging our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
. We have false ego to project,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
lack a wise brain to implement it for the betterment of our economy, promoting the agricultural sector and rural
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. Our focus is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
to gain a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
word from the mouth of the foreigner, though we are receiving continuous criticism from our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
.

We have failed to
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respect
the unity in diversity, projecting
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different
rallies and demanding
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own
region to
be split
further
. Where has the unity gone, why are we seeking a split in our states? Last
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but
definitely not the least is the status of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
in Indian society
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
. We have not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
blackened our face within our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
worldwide, by dis-respecting and assaulting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
from
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different
countries, who have visited India with the faith of gaining
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
respect
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Women
have been downtrodden and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
lack safety in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
country. What else can be more shameful than this? Thinking
deeply
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
us realize that it’s we who have permitted pubs, disco, night outs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
openly
, and the liberty is
being misused
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

These aspects of globalization definitely need to
be blacklisted
at the earliest. It’s the need of hour; we need to realize this high time and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
educating our children right from the childhood the art of deriving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
virtues, thereby maintaining our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
uniqueness.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
’s
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join
hands to save our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
from getting destructed.
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IELTS essay As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. Take a stand and build up your argument.

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
752 words
6.0
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