Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

As compared to the past, people nowadays are choosing to have fewer children than their parents and grandparents. Describe some of the problems that having fever children can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

Western societies are known for low birthrates. While a couple of generations back, couples often had four or more children, the average today hover around one or two. Having fewer children may require additional help from outside the immediate family and slower developmental growth for their younger additions, though the trend could be reversed by changing how families are represented. When parents have fewer children, the need for support from outside the nuclear family increases while development tends to slow. For working parent, a young only-child may require another guardian from extended family, a friend of parents', or even daycare. This can be a burden in terms of others' time and energy, or a family 's finances in the latter case. An older sibling, however, could instead handle babysitting responsibilities. Additionally, younger siblings often model brothers and sisters. Younger children often lean to walk faster, talk faster, and achieve other milestones more quickly. While certainly not the end of the world if child grows up alone, parents eager to get past some of the early hurdles may wish for such an example. To encourage parents to have more kids would firstly require changing how families are represented in the media. People's attitudes are influenced very much by indirect message, even from the shows they watch. For example, if the families they stream on screen usually consist of one or two children, it could be associated as the norm. As in the case of the youngest internalizing the behavior of their older siblings, surrounding viewers with large larger model families could potentially increase the amount of kids they consider as standard. In conclusion, many families today stop at one or two children, but need additional support. Additionally, their kids may not develop as quickly in certain areas. By incorporating large families in the media, however, the trend could be revered
Western societies
are known
for low birthrates. While a couple of generations back, couples
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
had four or more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, the average
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
hover around one or two. Having fewer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
may require additional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from outside the immediate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
and slower developmental growth for their younger additions, though the trend could
be reversed
by changing how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
are represented
.

When
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
have fewer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, the need for support from outside the nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
increases while development tends to slow. For working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parent
, a young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
-child may require another guardian from extended
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
, a friend of parents', or even daycare. This can be a burden in terms of others' time and energy, or a
There probably shouldn’t be a space before the apostrophe.
family 's
finances in the latter case. An older sibling,
however
, could
instead
handle babysitting responsibilities.
Additionally
, younger siblings
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
model brothers and sisters. Younger
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
lean to walk faster, talk faster, and achieve other milestones more
quickly
. While
certainly
not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the world if child grows up alone,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
eager to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
past
If the text is a generality, ‘of the’ is not necessary.
some of the
early hurdles may wish for such an example.

To encourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to have more kids would
firstly
require changing how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
are represented
in the media.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
's attitudes
are influenced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much by indirect message, even from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
.
For example
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
they stream on screen
usually
consist of one or two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, it could
be associated
as the norm. As in the case of the youngest internalizing the behavior of their older siblings, surrounding viewers with large larger model
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
could
potentially
increase the amount of kids they consider as standard.

In conclusion
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
at one or two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
need additional support.
Additionally
, their kids may not develop as
quickly
in certain areas. By incorporating large
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
in the media,
however
, the trend could be
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.
revered

IELTS essay As compared to the past, people nowadays are choosing to have fewer children than their parents and grandparents. Describe some of the problems that having fever children can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • As compared to the past, people nowadays are choosing to have fewer children than their parents and grandparents. Describe some of the problems that having fever children can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.