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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals, which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals, which are useful to humans. DmMA

Various animals have gone extinct and still, these numbers are increased. It is argued that, it is better to protect a type of fauna which brings benefit to human live. However, from my perspective, it is egoistical claim, we need to preserve them all. First of all, it is utterly obvious that, animals have a right to live and protected. In fact, they also need to live in a world of freedom as us, with no animal hunting activities that are just meet people demand. One of the primary reason for shooting animals is not only for food or furs but also for selfish matter. Humans mainly believe that, their extraordinary intellegence always greater from other living species thus, ideology such as who owns guns that have to right to kill. But what about ethical side of it? Is it really tough to stay away from killer instict? More than just gut instinct human conscience is a moral muscle and it would be brutal to let animals die. Secondly, only concerving living animals can led to great loss of biodiversity. Actually, whole ecosistem consist complex system which every creatures has a connection with one another. When one vahished, related animalas would be severelly affected. These biological unbalance can trigger natural disaster which is unobtainable to return its former position. To conclude

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animals
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. It is argued
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live
. However
, from my perspective, it is egoistical claim, we need to preserve them all.

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, it is utterly
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animals
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live
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live
 in a world of freedom as us, with no You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
animal
 hunting activities that are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
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meet
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people
 demand. One of the primary reason for shooting You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 is not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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but
also
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intellegence
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, ideology such as who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possesses
owns
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have to
 right to kill. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 what about ethical side of it? Is it really
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instict
? More than This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
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let
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animals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :pass away
die
.

Secondly
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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concerving
 living You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 can led to great loss of biodiversity. Actually, whole Possible spelling mistake found.ecosystem
ecosistem
 consist complex system which every The noun should be probably in the singular form: "creature"?creature
creatures
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has
 a connection with one another. When one Possible spelling mistake found.vanished
vahished
, related Possible spelling mistake found.animalsanimal as
animalas
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severelly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :impacted
affected
. These biological unbalance can trigger natural disaster which is unobtainable to return its former position.

To conclude