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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? e5eeB
Nowadays, professionals prefer to live in developed countries to advance their careers. I believe there are two main problems it may create but also some practical steps we can take. Perhaps the major problem we need to deal with is salary and offering better life standards. It's difficult for poor countries to achieve economic achievement and also improve better living standards. Due to the lack of professionals such as doctors and teachers, the community of these countries struggle with the educational and medical system. In addition, because of the migration of professionals, this poor country is dependent on foreign technology which is too expensive. It costs billions of dollars for them. Finally, migration of skilled professionals from undeveloped to developing countries may lead to problems such as lack of professionals and economic crisis. One way to combat the migration of professionals is to increase the salary and offer better living standards. One of the reasons that professionals leave their hometown to get better salaries and benefits. So the government can offer better salaries to keep professionals in their hometown. Another possible solution is that the government can spend their budget to improve the good living standards since every professional is looking for better living standards. In the past lots of countries had the same problem and they decided to change the system they increase the amount of salaries and offer better living standards this way now they are one of the developed countries in the world In conclusion, professionals are leaving their poor countries since they don't have any chance. Unfortunately this kind of migration hurts the economy of their hometown and to stop this, governments should increase salary and create new job opportunities.
Nowadays,
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prefer to
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in developed
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to advance their careers. I believe there are two main
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problems
it may create
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also
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practical steps we can take.

Perhaps the major
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problem
we need to deal with is
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salary
and offering
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better
life
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standards
. It's difficult for poor
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countries
to achieve economic achievement and
also
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improve
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better
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living
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standards
. Due to the lack of
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professionals
such as doctors and teachers, the community of these
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countries
struggle with the educational and medical system.
In addition
,
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because
of the
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migration
of
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professionals
, this poor
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country
is dependent on foreign technology which is too expensive. It costs billions of dollars for them.
Finally
,
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migration
of skilled
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professionals
from undeveloped to developing
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countries
may lead to
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problems
such as lack of
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professionals
and economic crisis.

One way to combat the
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migration
of
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professionals
is to increase the
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salary
and offer
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better
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living
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standards
. One of the reasons that
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professionals
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leave
their hometown to
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get
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better
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salaries
and benefits.
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government
can offer
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better
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salaries
to
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keep
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professionals
in their hometown. Another possible solution is that the
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government
can spend their budget to
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improve
the
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good
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living
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standards
since every
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professional
is looking for
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better
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living
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standards
. In the past lots of
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countries
had the same
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problem and
they decided to
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change
the system they increase the amount of
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salaries
and offer
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better
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living
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standards
this way
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now
they are one of the developed
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countries
in the
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world


In conclusion
,
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professionals
are leaving their poor
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countries
since they don't have any chance. Unfortunately this kind of
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migration
hurts the economy of their hometown and to
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stop
this,
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governments
should increase
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salary
and create new job opportunities.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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