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All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children’s future.

All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children’s future. 566On
It is heated debate. Every parent wants their children to have the best possible survival. Most people think that students should learn curriculum activities from their schools, while others claim that students should learn as many books as possible. The school should teach academic skills in this subject. I will discuss both aspects of the argument and elaborate it below. To begin with, In the context of health organization all children need to develop physical abilities and participate in sports such as games, debates and dramas to build confidence in the younger generation as well as, spots and games would maintain health and remove stress. For instance, in foreign schools and universities special classes are arranged for curriculum activities. Abroad, the school also organizes international sports competitions through various schools. Furthermore, curriculum activities develop globalisation and create communication between several countries beside, children also learn about other culture and their norms values. On the other hand, a range of subjects for children much better. Future education will provide good opportunities in the future. Jobs are allocated by rank of academic degree. For example, people can get their dream home and more income by qualification. In addition, children should pay attention to additional subjects so that they can improve their mental abilities. To conclude, the both practical skills and theoretical subjects are equally important. In my opinion, school should teach to students more and more other skills which make occupation in future.
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is heated
debate. Every parent wants their
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children
to have the best possible survival. Most
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people
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think
that students should learn curriculum activities from their
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schools
, while others claim that students should learn as
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many
books as possible. The
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school
should teach academic
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skills
in this
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subject
. I will discuss both aspects of the argument and elaborate it below.

To
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begin
with, In the context of health organization all
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children
need to develop physical abilities and participate in sports such as games, debates and dramas to build confidence in the younger generation
as well
as, spots and games would maintain health and remove
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stress
.
For instance
, in foreign
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schools
and universities special classes
are arranged
for curriculum activities. Abroad, the
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school
also
organizes international sports competitions through various
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schools
.
Furthermore
, curriculum activities develop
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globalisation
and create communication between several countries beside,
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children
also
learn about
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other
culture and their norms values.

On the
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other
hand, a range of
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subjects
for
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children
much better. Future education will provide
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good
opportunities in the future. Jobs
are allocated
by rank of academic degree.
For example
,
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people
can
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get
their dream home and more income by qualification.
In addition
,
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children
should pay attention to additional
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subjects
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so
that they can
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improve
their mental abilities.

To conclude
, the both practical
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skills
and theoretical
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subjects
are
equally
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important
. In my opinion,
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school
should teach to students more and more
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other
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skills
which
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make
occupation
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IELTS essay All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children’s future.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
241 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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