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Advantages and Disadvantages of keeping animals in zoos

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There are two different perspectives on keeping animals in the zoo, conservation groups think that zoos are cruel and all zoos should be abolished. However, some people think zoos can help protect animals. One of the major concerns is that animals are under threat from humans because humans interfere with the natural environment. For instance, keeping animals cooped up in cages leads to animals lose their instincts. Therefore, this has serious repercussions for declining bear and contributes to animal extinction and it is an inhumane activity. In addition, there are many potential risks associated with keeping animals in captivity. For example, the animal disease can be transferred between them and they might come down with some health issues. On the other hand, zoos provide a safe place for animals, so protect endangered animals from extinction. firstly, many animals are treated in zoos because more Zookeeper receives professional training before work in zoos and they know the diet and lifestyle of animals. also, vaccinating animal vets protect them from death. Additionally, keeping wild animals in zoos is also an opportunity to reserve animals. Some animals are threatened by illegal hunters and poachers for many reasons such as meat, ivory, and fur. In a nutshell, I suppose the best solution for protection from danger and extinction is they should protect their natural habitats, but they should not keep in captivity in zoos since it is an inhuman activity.
There are two
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different
perspectives on keeping
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animals
in the zoo, conservation groups
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think
that zoos are cruel and all zoos should
be abolished
.
However
,
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some
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people
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think
zoos can
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help
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protect
animals.

One of the major concerns is that
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animals
are under threat from humans
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because
humans interfere with the natural environment.
For instance
, keeping
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animals
cooped up in cages leads to
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animals
lose their instincts.
Therefore
, this has serious repercussions for declining bear and contributes to
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animal
extinction and it is an inhumane activity.

In addition
, there are
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many
potential
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risks
associated with keeping
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animals
in captivity.
For example
, the
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animal
disease can
be transferred
between
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them and
they might
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come
down with
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some
health issues.

On the other hand
, zoos provide a safe place for
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animals
,
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so
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protect
endangered
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animals
from extinction.
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firstly
,
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many
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animals
are treated
in zoos
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because
more Zookeeper receives professional training
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before
work in
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zoos and
they know the diet and lifestyle of
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animals
.
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also
, vaccinating
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animal
vets
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protect
them from death.
Additionally
, keeping wild
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animals
in zoos is
also
an opportunity to reserve
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animals
.
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Some
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animals
are threatened
by illegal hunters and poachers for
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many
reasons such as meat, ivory, and fur.

In a nutshell, I suppose the best solution for protection from
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danger
and extinction is they should
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protect
their natural habitats,
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but
they should not
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keep
in captivity in zoos since it is an inhuman activity.
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IELTS essay Advantages and Disadvantages of keeping animals in zoos

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