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A SMALL AMOUNT OF MONEY CAN MAKE A BIG DIFFERENCE.

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Nowadays, money is an important thing in the life of humans, every person also needs the money to buy food, water, clothes, a house, and vehicles. Definitely, to respond to those necessities, you must have a lot of money, but you have already thought that a small whole lot of money can make a great modification? I firmly believe that a bit of money also can assist individuals in need get out of poverty, as well as the last straw, the straw that broke the camel’s back. Helping the poor by giving them the first bit of capital so they can make their own profit then. Therefore, we can go to the underprivileged who live in remote and impoverished locations to help and improve their lives better. For instance, we can go to poor villages, where living conditions and education are very difficult for people, give them livestock to raise like dairy cows or goats, when they grow up they can take milk and meat to sell and earn a larger sum of money than the original value of those animals. There is a proverb that says: “ many a little make a mickle ”, that means every person contributes a little bit, it will become a huge adjustment. As a result, each person in our society gives a small amount of money, but the more people there are, the larger the quantity of money gets, and with that money, we can aid more people. For example, When people in the central area are flooded, people from all over Vietnam come together to donate funds to help them escape poverty, avoid hunger during floods, repair flood damage, and potentially return to life back to normalcy. It can be shown that the contribution is little, but the results are greater than we realize. In conclusion, despite the fact that each person's contribution is little, it may have a big impact, as Vincent Van Gogh said: “ Great things are done by a series of small things brought together”. From there, we will contribute to helping society become more developed, no one is left behind.
Nowadays,
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money
is an
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important
thing in the life of humans, every person
also
needs the
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money
to
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buy
food, water, clothes, a
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house
, and vehicles. Definitely, to respond to those necessities, you
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must
have
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a lot of
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money
,
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but
you have already
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thought
that a
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small
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whole lot
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money
can
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make
a great modification? I
firmly
believe that a bit of
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money
also
can assist individuals in need
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get
out of poverty,
as well
as the last straw, the straw that broke the camel’s back.

Helping the poor by giving them the
first
bit of capital
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so
they can
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make
their
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own
profit then.
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, we can go to the underprivileged who
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live
in remote and impoverished locations to
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help
and
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improve
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lives
better.
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, we can go to poor villages, where living conditions and education are
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very
difficult for
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people
, give them livestock to raise like dairy cows or goats, when they grow up they can take milk and meat to sell and earn a larger sum of
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money
than the original value of those animals.

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“
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many
a
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little
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make
a
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mickle
”, that means every person contributes a
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little bit
, it will become a huge adjustment.
As a result
, each person in our society gives a
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small
amount of
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money
,
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but
the more
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people
there are, the larger the quantity of
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money
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gets
, and with that
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money
, we can aid more
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people
.
For example
, When
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people
in the central area
are flooded
,
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people
from all over Vietnam
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come
together to donate funds to
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help
them escape poverty, avoid hunger during floods, repair flood damage, and
potentially
return to life back to normalcy. It can
be shown
that the contribution is
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little
,
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but
the results are greater than we realize.

In conclusion
, despite the fact that each person's contribution is
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little
, it may have a
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big
impact, as
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Vincent Van Gogh
said:
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“
Great things
are done
by a series of
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small
things brought together”. From there, we will contribute to helping society become more developed, no one is
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left
behind.
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IELTS essay A SMALL AMOUNT OF MONEY CAN MAKE A BIG DIFFERENCE.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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