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A no. of different medical traditions are now widely known and used ;Western medical using drugs and surgery, herbal medicines, acupuncture(using needles at certain points) and so on .How important is the patients mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment?

A no. of different medical traditions are now widely known and used; Western medical using drugs and surgery, herbal medicines, acupuncture(using needles at certain points) and so on. How important is the patients mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment? Y1Dm
Using several different medical methods to cure the disease are now more in trend. To treat many diseases in effective way by ensuring the patients interest in that treatment is must. Through this writing I like to throw light on various aspects of this issue in the subsequent paragraphs. To Strengthen my point of view, firstly, I would like to put forth on an idea that of in this modern era with the advent of technology a number of medical equipment are introduced to satisfy the patient. However, many surgeries are performing by the specialist doctors to avoid pain for minor as well as major operations. Besides this, some patients feel much better by using acupressure to maintain their body healthy. Although elopathy treatment is more preferable by many patients, yet, herbals as well as homoepathy medicines play a vital role to cure any disease. Not only homopethy medicines treat the present condition of the patient but also it helps to remove the symtoms of that disease but the most indispensable thing is to boost up the mental thinking of the patient for recovery. To cite an example, in 2018 a survey reveals that 80% of the patients recover within a month, whom will power was strong than that of others. To conclude, indeed, it is very essential to control the emotions of the patient towards his/her treatment since only due to this, one may come out of worse condition easily otherwise it could pay cost his/her death also.
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different
medical methods to cure the
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disease
are
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now
more in trend. To treat
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many
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diseases
in effective way by ensuring the
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patients
interest in that treatment is
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must
. Through this writing I like to throw light on various aspects of this issue in the subsequent paragraphs.

To Strengthen my point of view,
firstly
, I would like to put forth on an
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idea
that of in this modern era with the advent of technology a number of medical equipment
are introduced
to satisfy the
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patient
.
However
,
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many
surgeries are performing by the specialist doctors to avoid pain for minor
as well
as major operations.
Besides
this,
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some
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patients
feel much better by using acupressure to maintain their body healthy.

Although
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elopathy
treatment is more preferable by
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many
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patients
,
yet
, herbals
as well
as
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homoepathy
medicines play a vital role to cure any
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disease
. Not
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only
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homopethy
medicines treat the present condition of the
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patient
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but
also
it
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helps
to remove the
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symtoms
of that
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disease
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but
the most indispensable thing is to boost up the mental thinking of the
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patient
for recovery. To cite an example, in 2018 a survey reveals that 80% of the
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patients
recover within a month, whom will power was
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strong
than that of others.

To conclude
,
indeed
, it is
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very
essential to control the emotions of the
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patient
towards his/her treatment since
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only
due to this, one may
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come
out of worse condition
easily
otherwise
it could pay cost his/her death
also
.
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IELTS essay A no. of different medical traditions are now widely known and used; Western medical using drugs and surgery, herbal medicines, acupuncture(using needles at certain points) and so on. How important is the patients mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment?

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