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A menhaden, also known as a mossbunker, bunker, and pogy, is any forage fish of the genera Brevoortia and Ethmidum of the family Clupeidae. Gulf menhaden and Atlantic menhaden are small oily-fleshed fish characterized by their bright silver color and a se

A menhaden, also known as a mossbunker, bunker, and pogy, is any forage fish of the genera Brevoortia and Ethmidum of the family Clupeidae. Gulf menhaden and Atlantic menhaden are small oily-fleshed fish characterized by their bright silver color and a se bYo2q
The article states that a ban action for fishing the menhaden fish is not the best solution and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that after rexamining the information in the passage, the ban is the right solution, and he refutes each of the Author's reasons. First, the reading asserts that one of the factors that cause the decline in the number of menhaden fish is the large population of striped bass, which feed on menhaden. On the other hand, the professor contends that by activating the restriction on hunting the menhaden, we will keep the nature equilibrium, and the nature will keep the number of menhaden without decline. Second, the reading posits that the ban will affect on all animals because menhaden is a main source of food for them. The professor opposes this point by saying that there are many species that can replace the menhaden as a food source. So, this ban will not affect on other animals seriously. Third, the article claims that a lot of people will become unemployed after the fishing restrictions. However, the professor refutes this point by explaining that this will be a temporary situation. According to the professor, people who depend on fishing the menhaden will return back fishing, but only they need to change the type of fish they catch.
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the menhaden fish is not the best solution and provides three reasons of support.
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is the right solution, and he refutes each of the Author's reasons.

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contends that by activating the restriction on hunting the menhaden, we will
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keep
the nature equilibrium, and the nature will
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keep
the number of menhaden without decline.

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menhaden is a main source of food for them. The
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opposes this point by saying that there are
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species that can replace the menhaden as a food source.
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will not
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people
will become unemployed after the
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restrictions.
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, the
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refutes this point by explaining that this will be a temporary situation. According to the
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,
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the menhaden will
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,
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IELTS essay A menhaden, also known as a mossbunker, bunker, and pogy, is any forage fish of the genera Brevoortia and Ethmidum of the family Clupeidae. Gulf menhaden and Atlantic menhaden are small oily-fleshed fish characterized by their bright silver color and a se

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