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A large number of deaths are caused by road accidents. Why do so many road accidents occur? Make recommendations that would help reduce the number of road accidents

A large number of deaths are caused by road accidents. Why do so many road accidents occur? Make recommendations that would help reduce the number of road accidents E3pBq
People getting killed in road accidents is a curse placed on us by ourselves. In this essay, I will focus on three possible causes—namely, the roadworthiness of vehicles, the condition of our roads, and the errors made by humans. Many accidents are caused by inadequate vehicle maintenance and repairs. For example, bald tires and defective brakes will dramatically increase the stopping time of a vehicle. Regular mechanical inspections would reduce the number of unroadworthy vehicles. Road conditions also contribute to road accidents. Road surfaces that are in a bad state of repair and have many potholes are dangerous. In addition, narrow roads with sharp curves can cause accidents. Lastly, snow and rain make the road surfaces slippery and difficult to drive on. The government will have to spend more money on road maintenance and so improve the condition of our road surfaces. More care will have to be taken when designing roads to get rid of hazardous road features. The third cause of road accidents is driver errors. Drunken driving and excessive speed frequently result in drivers misjudging distances and losing control of their vehicles. Other examples are drivers who pass without the necessary care and fail to use their indicators when turning. Although the problems associated with driver errors are the most difficult to solve, advertising campaigns have proved to be effective in educating drivers about road safety. Furthermore, harsher penalties such as heavy fines and the suspension of driver’s licenses could be applied to discourage such dangerous behavior. In conclusion, although it is inevitable that some accidents will occur, there are ways to reduce their frequency. Stricter and more regular vehicle testing by the authorities and more severe penalties for careless drivers are needed. In addition, more funds will have to be allocated to maintain and upgrade roads and launch advertising campaigns.
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made
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are caused
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vehicle
maintenance

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and
repairs.

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, bald tires and defective brakes will
dramatically


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increase
the stopping time of a
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vehicle
. Regular
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mechanical


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inspections
would
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reduce
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unroadworthy
vehicles.

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also
contribute to
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accidents
.
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surfaces that are in a
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bad
state of repair and have
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many


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potholes
are
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dangerous
.
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roads
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curves


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surfaces

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slippery
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government
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more money on
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maintenance and
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surfaces. More care will
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roads


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to
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rid of hazardous
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features.

The third cause of
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road
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accidents
is
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errors.

Drunken driving and excessive speed
frequently
result in drivers

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misjudging
distances and losing control of their
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vehicles
. Other

examples are
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drivers
who pass without the necessary care and fail to

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use
their indicators when turning. Although the problems
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associated


with
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errors are the most difficult to solve, advertising

campaigns have proved to be effective in educating
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drivers
about

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road
safety.
Furthermore
, harsher penalties such as heavy fines and

the suspension of
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licenses could
be applied
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such
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dangerous
behavior.

In conclusion
, although it is inevitable that
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some
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accidents
will occur,

there are ways to
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reduce
their frequency. Stricter and more
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regular


vehicle testing by the authorities and more severe penalties for

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careless
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drivers
are needed
.
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, more funds will
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have to
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be


allocated to maintain and upgrade
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roads
and launch advertising

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campaigns
.
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IELTS essay A large number of deaths are caused by road accidents. Why do so many road accidents occur? Make recommendations that would help reduce the number of road accidents

Essay
  American English
33 paragraphs
304 words
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