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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? 3GX5
A healthy man keeps healthy vision & thoughts. Therefore, a healthy individual maintains good diet, enough level of physical exercise and ignore stress. The country I live is developing country where people struggle and toil the hard work which leads to poor health. In subsequent explanations, I will produce the reason of poor health and methods to get rid of ill health. Considering the reasons of poor health, shortcoming of financial support appears which leads to poor health of people. Not everyone is affluent and neither of them, get any monetary support from government. For example, the corona period has become one of the reason of loosing job and during lockdown, people has no hope for jobs. In this pandemic government does not support their people and left them with no food, no transport, no hospitals, no shelter. The secondary reason appears of being uneducated. People are not educated and with the absence of education, those people are remain segregated from the useful information which is introduced in newspaper and brochures. This keeps away the people of right diet which is different for every individual. Similarly, they are not able to read health magazine which can help them to be healthy. Particularly looking upon the way of being healthy person, money matter for needy person should be addressed by the government or the person should have some saving which can help them in emergency. Secondly, being uneducated is not a curse but yes still a literate person can help himself without depending on anyone. Moreover there are many methods are available to help uneducated people. For example, Social media is very strong and person with very basic education and help himself to read health information which may be help to gain health. In addition, the government’s services should be reached to people where it is needed especially poor citizens. These above-mentioned problems can help the oneself to improve his health and get rid of stress In a nutshell, improving health and releasing stress in developing country is difficult but suggested approaches help the individual to maintain health
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man
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keeps
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healthy
vision & thoughts.
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, a
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healthy
individual maintains
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good
diet,
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enough
level of physical exercise and
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ignore
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stress
. The country I
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live
is
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developing country
where
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people
struggle and toil the
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hard
work which leads to
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poor
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health
. In subsequent explanations, I will produce the
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reason
of
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poor
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health
and methods to
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get
rid of ill health.

Considering the
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reasons
of
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poor
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health
, shortcoming of financial support appears which leads to
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poor
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health
of
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people
. Not everyone is affluent and neither of them,
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get
any monetary support from
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government
.
For example
, the corona period has become one of the
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reason
of loosing job and during lockdown,
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people
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has
no hope for jobs. In this pandemic
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government
does not support their
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people
and
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left
them with no food, no transport, no hospitals, no shelter.

The secondary
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reason
appears of
being uneducated
.
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People
are not educated and with the absence of education, those
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people
are
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remain
segregated from the useful information which
is introduced
in newspaper and brochures. This
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keeps
away the
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people
of right diet which is
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different
for every individual.
Similarly
, they are not able to read
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health
magazine which can
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help
them to be healthy.

Particularly
looking upon the way of being
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healthy
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person
, money matter for needy
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person
should
be addressed
by the
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government
or the
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person
should have
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some
saving which can
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help
them in emergency.
Secondly
,
being uneducated
is not a curse
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but
yes
still
a literate
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person
can
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help
himself without depending on anyone.
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Moreover
there are
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many
methods are available to
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help
uneducated
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people
.
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, Social media is
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very
strong and
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person
with
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very
basic education and
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help
himself to read
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health
information which may be
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help
to gain
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health
.
In addition
, the
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government’s
services should
be reached
to
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people
where it
is needed
especially
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poor
citizens. These above-mentioned problems can
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help
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the oneself
to
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improve
his
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health
and
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get
rid of
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stress


In a nutshell, improving
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health
and releasing
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stress
in
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developing country
is difficult
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but
suggested approaches
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help
the individual to maintain
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health
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IELTS essay A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
346 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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