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3. Negative impacts of children playing computer games

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Professional Nurse’ is my passion always. Truly saying that my mother is my motivator and mentor in this matter. She is a nurse by profession and I heard many stories in regards to a nurse-patient relationship, which always made me either cry or proud to be a nurse. From her stories I learned that nurse can act in many roles as a listener, educator, healer, companion, friend and so on. Moreover, the health care system demands teamwork and hard work which I appreciate the most. When I entered the same field, I can feel that emotions that motivate me always to do my best. Every one of my clients is now my energy to move forward, their blessings and prayers are my strong hands to excel in my personal and professional life. I will consider that this opportunity is one of the greatest gifts to excel me and in future, I will be devoting and exploring myself to the world.
Professional
Nurse’
is my passion
always
.
Truly
saying that my mother is my motivator
and


mentor
in this matter. She is a
nurse
by profession and I heard
many
stories
in regards to
a


nurse-patient
relationship, which always made me either cry or proud to be a
nurse
. From

her stories I learned that
nurse
can act in
many
roles as a listener, educator, healer,

companion, friend and
so
on.
Moreover
, the health care system demands teamwork and
hard


work
which I appreciate the most. When I entered the same field, I can feel
that


emotions
that motivate me always to do my best. Every one of my clients is
now
my


energy to
move
forward, their blessings and prayers are my strong hands to excel in my

personal
and professional life. I will consider that this opportunity is one of the greatest
gifts


to
excel me and
in future
, I will be devoting and exploring myself to the world.
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IELTS essay 3. Negative impacts of children playing computer games

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160 words
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