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Write about the graph. It show the proportion of participation in sporting activities.

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The line graph shows the proportion of the participation in sport activities in a small town in the UK from 1960 to 1995. It is clearly observed from the chart that Over the entire period the figures for swimming and jogging increased moderately. Conversely, that of cycling saw a slight decrease during the same period. In 1960 the percentage of swimming was 10%, whereas that of jogging was higher at 20%. From this year until 1990 these figures increased to nearly 35% and approximately 50%, respectively. Between 1990 and 1995, the percentage of joggers remained constant, while that of swimmers experienced a marginal increased to just over 40%. In other hand, from 1990 t0 1970 the percentage of cycling decreased slightly from 50% to 40%. In the next 5 years, it saw a marginal increase and stood at 45%. In the subsequent years, the figure for cycling declined from 45% to well over 20%.
The line graph
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shows
the proportion of the participation in sport activities in a
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small
town in the UK from 1960 to 1995. It is
clearly
observed from the chart that Over the entire period the figures for swimming and jogging increased
moderately
.
Conversely
, that of cycling
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saw
a slight decrease during the same period.

In 1960 the percentage of swimming was 10%, whereas that of jogging was higher at 20%. From this year until 1990 these figures increased to
nearly
35% and approximately 50%,
respectively
. Between 1990 and 1995, the percentage of joggers remained constant, while that of swimmers experienced a marginal increased to
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just
over 40%.

In other hand,
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from 1990 t0 1970
the percentage of cycling decreased
slightly
from 50% to 40%. In the
next
5 years, it
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saw
a marginal increase and stood at 45%.
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In
the subsequent years, the figure for cycling declined from 45% to well over 20%.
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IELTS academic Write about the graph. It show the proportion of participation in sporting activities.

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