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Wheat export in three countries

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The diagram illustrates how much wheat was exported from three different countries including Canada, European Community and Australia over a period of six years from 1985 to 1990. Overall, although the figure for Canada was the most popular type which exported wheat at first, it was replaced by European Community towards the end of the survey. In contrast, Australia remained the least significant throughout the period. At first, Canada was the most popular with exportation of below 20 million tonnes and the figure decreased by 3 million tonnes, after which it grew dramatically and had reached a peak of 25 million tonnes by 1988. However, this upward trend was suddenly broken and plummeted sharply over the next year to reach around 14 million tonnes before reaching almost the same level as it was at the beginning of the period. Finally, the figure for European community was initially almost 2 million tonnes higher than that for Australia`s cereal sales (17 million tonnes vs 15 million tonnes). However, while the former went down slightly by 4 million tonnes, following which it remained relatively stable before climbing and outstripping Canada in 1989, peaking at over 20 The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. ; million tonnes in 1990 was followed by a moderate fall before a plateau over the rest of the period. the latter experienced a small growth of 2 million tonnes, which
The diagram illustrates how much wheat
was exported
from three
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different
countries including Canada, European Community and Australia
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over
a period of six years from 1985 to 1990.

Overall
, although the figure for Canada was the most popular type which exported wheat at
first
, it
was replaced
by European Community towards the
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end
of the survey.
In contrast
, Australia remained the least significant throughout the period.

At
first
, Canada was the most popular with exportation of below 20
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million
tonnes and the figure decreased by 3
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million
tonnes, after which it grew
dramatically
and had reached a peak of 25
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million
tonnes by 1988.
However
, this upward trend was
suddenly
broken and plummeted
sharply
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over
the
next
year to reach around 14
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million
tonnes
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before
reaching almost the same level as it was at the beginning of the period.

Finally
, the figure for European community was
initially
almost 2
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million
tonnes higher than that for
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Australia`s
cereal sales (17
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million
tonnes vs 15
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million
tonnes).
However
, while the former went down
slightly
by 4
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million
tonnes, following which it remained
relatively
stable
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before
climbing and outstripping Canada in 1989, peaking at
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over
20

The graph below
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shows
the differences in wheat exports
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over
three

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different
areas.
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million
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was followed
by a moderate fall
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before
a plateau
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over
the rest of the period.

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the
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IELTS academic Wheat export in three countries

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
236 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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