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What are the main features of developing agriculture?

What are the main features of developing agriculture? m18D1

This diagram is the information about is agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services – to the UK economy in the twentieth century. These three sectors show us the development over the years. The first chart shows 1900 years when agriculture was 49%, manufacturing - 45% and business only 2-3%. In 1950 the agriculture increased by 2-3%, business increased by 7-8%, but manufacturing decreased by 6-7%. If we compare the data of the 1900 sector with 2000, we will see the following: agriculture decreased by 48%, manufacturing increased by 33-35%. Also we can see that agriculture decreased by more 50 % and in the near future we may lose this sector altogether. Сlearly, diagram shows that the importance of finance and business has grown over the past hundred years and that this trend will continue to grow in the coming decades.

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manufacturing
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 decreased by 6-7%.

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 the following: You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhorticultureculturecultivationhusbandry
agriculture
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manufacturing
 increased by 33-35%. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
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 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhorticultureculturecultivationhusbandry
agriculture
 decreased by more 50 % and in the near future we may lose this sector altogether.

Сlearly
, diagram This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
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 that the importance of finance and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldworkemploymenttrade
business
 has grown over the past hundred years and that this trend will continue to grow in the coming decades. 