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Two maps show the changes of coastal town from 1950 to 2007.

Two maps show the changes of coastal town from 1950 to 2007. jV6Ky
The maps illustrate the development taken place in coastal towns between 1950 to 2007. Overall, it is evident from the comparison that the new accommodation facilities were introduced in 2007, which did not appear before in the coastal town. To begin with, the industrial area was located on the left side of the map in 1950, which was transformed into a multi-story car park in 2007. However, the swimming pool was constructed on the same side as the above mentioned, which was not remarkable before. At top of the map, there was a vacant area located in 1950, which was converted into a park. Yacht marina took place in 2007 in the northern direction, which was not available in 1950. Furthermore, a new residence took place on the northeastern side in 2007, which was not visible in 1950. In addition, many shops were built in 2007. Which was not available in 1950. Moreover, new houses were developed on the southeast side in 2007, before that there was a grassland existed in 1950. Lastly, there was an empty was noticed in 1950, which was converted into cinema center in 2007.
The maps illustrate the development taken place in coastal towns
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 1950 and 2007".
between 1950 to 2007
.

Overall
, it is evident from the comparison that the new accommodation facilities
were introduced
in 2007, which did not appear
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
in the coastal town.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, the industrial area
was located
on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
side of the map in 1950, which
was transformed
into a multi-story car park in 2007.
However
, the swimming pool
was constructed
on the same side as the above mentioned, which was not remarkable
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
. At top of the map, there was a vacant area located in 1950, which
was converted
into a park. Yacht marina took place in 2007 in the northern direction, which was not available in 1950.

Furthermore
, a new residence took place on the northeastern side in 2007, which was not visible in 1950.
In addition
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
shops
were built
in 2007.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
was not available in 1950.
Moreover
, new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
were developed
on the southeast side in 2007,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
that there was a grassland existed in 1950.
Lastly
, there was an empty
was noticed
in 1950, which
was converted
into cinema center in 2007.
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IELTS academic Two maps show the changes of coastal town from 1950 to 2007.

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