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The graph illustrates the approximated number of consumption of fast food including pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers by Australian youngsters.

The graph illustrates the approximated number of consumption of fast food including pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers by Australian youngsters. 6aQR8
The graph illustrates the approximated number of consumption of fast food including pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers by Australian youngsters. In 1975, pizza and hamburger are consumed by 5% to 10% by estimated, whereas fish and chips becomes the most picked in that moment by climbs up to 100% consumption. In 1985, pizza is approximately selected by 35%, hamburgers hit a peak at 82% by estimated. Interestingly, pizza and hamburgers still slightly increase during 1975-1985, while fish and chips are fluctuated between 80% to 100% during this period. During 1985-2000, hamburgers rise up gradually between 80% to 100%. The same pattern as hamburgers, pizza immediately increases to the point at 82%, then the number of pizza consumption is level off. Turn back to the most popular fast food in first period, fish and chips continue decreases after fluctuations of the number show in the graph during 1975-1985. The number is approximately drop to 40%. Overall, pizza and hamburgers still climb up since 1957 and seem to be level off in 1995, whereas fish and chips is the only type of fast food which has a fluctuated informations, then the tread change to downward.
The graph illustrates the approximated
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food including pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers by Australian youngsters.

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by 5% to 10% by estimated, whereas fish and chips becomes the most picked
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in that moment
by climbs up to 100% consumption. In 1985, pizza is approximately selected by 35%, hamburgers hit a peak at 82% by estimated.
Interestingly
, pizza and hamburgers
still
slightly
increase during 1975-1985, while fish and chips
are fluctuated
between 80% to 100% during this period.

During 1985-2000, hamburgers rise up
gradually
between 80% to 100%. The same pattern as hamburgers, pizza immediately increases to the point at 82%, then the
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number
of pizza consumption is level off. Turn back to the most popular
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fast
food in
first
period, fish and chips continue decreases after fluctuations of the
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show
in the graph during 1975-1985. The
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is approximately
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drop
to 40%.

Overall
, pizza and hamburgers
still
climb up since 1957 and seem to be level off in 1995, whereas fish and chips is the
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food which has a fluctuated
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, then the tread
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to downward.
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