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two line graph that related to ownership of electric appliences and number of hours of housework per week per household

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The first line graph illustrates the ownership of electrical appliances such as washing machine, refrigerator, vacuum cleaner and the second line graph shows the number of hours of housework per week per household from 1920 to 2019. Using refrigerator and vacuum cleaner have been rose Steadily in the year of 1920 to 2000 which cause people spend fewer time for doing housework. Just in case of cleaning, vacuum cleaner helps people Clean their house easily and faster than before. Also refrigerator cause that preservation The food fresh Besides prevent spoiled food, fruits and meat. so when you want prepare meals, you can use half-ready food stuff that you keep in your refrigerator. Based on graph, using washing machine has been completely fluctuated. Since ownership of electrical appliances become increasing, people do their housework in short time.

The first
 line graph illustrates the ownership of electrical appliances such as washing machine, refrigerator, vacuum cleaner and the second line graph This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 the number of hours of housework per week per household from 1920 to 2019.

Using refrigerator and vacuum cleaner have been rose Steadily
 in the year of 1920 to 2000 which cause This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 spend fewer time for doing housework.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
Just
 in case of cleaning, vacuum cleaner This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 Clean their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
easily
 and faster than This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 refrigerator cause that preservation The food fresh Besides
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :preclude
prevent
 spoiled food, fruits and meat. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterSo
so
 when you Probably a preposition is missing after 'want'.want to prepare
want prepare
 meals, you can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 half-ready food stuff that you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 in your refrigerator.

Based on graph, using washing machine has been completely fluctuated.

Since ownership of electrical appliances become increasing, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 do their housework in short time. 

IELTS academic two line graph that related to ownership of electric appliences and number of hours of housework per week per household

Academic

American English

6 paragraphs

136 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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