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TOPIC: Do you think phone addiction is a serious problem? Write a persuasive essay of about 250 words on the topic above do you think phone addiction is a serious problem? write an essay of about 250 words on the topic above

TOPIC: Do you think phone addiction is a serious problem? Write a persuasive essay of about 250 words on the topic above do you think phone addiction is a serious problem? write an essay of about 250 words on the topic above 7PYPk
Mobile phones enable people to communicate with people all over the world in real-time. While this invention was created to empower us, it has instead come to dominate us. Smartphone addiction is now one of the most common vital problems. Of course, smartphones are undeniably useful and have changed our lives in a variety of ways. However, it appears a pity that these addictive devices are gradually taking over our lives. It is all too easy to become reliant on our phones, whether it is to navigate around with the map app or simply to check the time. As a result, we are becoming more anti-social, preferring to consult the internet rather than converse with other humans. Even when we are out, it appears that most of us struggle without our phones within arm's reach. Phones were invented to keep us more connected, and they have succeeded in doing so. We can now communicate through an infinite number of social media platforms, but this means we are losing genuine contact with one another. People are increasingly connecting through screens rather than in person, even when it comes to dating - dating apps and websites are more popular than ever. Mobile phones allow us to communicate with people all over the world while also allowing us to watch movies, take pictures, listen to music, surf the internet, and do a variety of other things. It is difficult to avoid becoming accustomed to it. It must, however, be devoid of any prey. This is due to the possibility of negative consequences. Many serious problems result from mobile addiction, including headaches, vision loss, sleepiness, depression, social isolation, stress, aggressive behavior, financial difficulties, squandered relationships, and so on. To summarize, phone addiction is a serious problem that we must begin to solve. Although mobile phones were designed for our convenience, we should limit their use in managing our lives. If you think you are becoming addicted to your phone, look into ways to get rid of it.
Mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
enable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to communicate with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
all over the world in real-time. While this invention
was created
to empower us, it has
instead
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to dominate us. Smartphone addiction is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
one of the most common vital problems.

Of course
, smartphones are
undeniably
useful and have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in a variety of ways.
However
, it appears a pity that these addictive devices are
gradually
taking over our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. It is all too easy to become reliant on our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
, whether it is to navigate around with the map app or
simply
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the time.
As a result
, we are becoming more anti-social, preferring to consult the internet
rather
than converse with other humans.

Even when we are
Did you mean "our"?
out
, it appears that most of us struggle without our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
within arm's reach.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Phones
were invented
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
us more connected, and they have succeeded in doing
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so
. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
communicate through an infinite number of social media platforms,
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but
this means we are losing genuine contact with one another.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
are
increasingly
connecting through screens
rather
than in person, even when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to dating
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
dating apps and websites are more popular than ever.

Mobile
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phones
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
us to communicate with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
all over the world while
also
allowing us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
movies, take pictures, listen to music, surf the internet, and do a variety of other things. It is difficult to avoid becoming accustomed to it. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
,
however
, be devoid of any prey. This is due to the possibility of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
consequences.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
serious problems result from mobile addiction, including headaches, vision loss, sleepiness, depression, social isolation,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
, aggressive behavior, financial difficulties, squandered relationships, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.

To summarize
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
addiction is a serious problem that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
to solve. Although mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
were designed
for our convenience, we should limit their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
in managing our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. If you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you are becoming addicted to your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
, look into ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of it.
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IELTS academic TOPIC: Do you think phone addiction is a serious problem? Write a persuasive essay of about 250 words on the topic above do you think phone addiction is a serious problem? write an essay of about 250 words on the topic above

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
333 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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