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This line chart illustrates the turn that took place of crime in Panama city in three different areas which are burglary, car theft and robbery from 2010 to 2019.

This line chart illustrates the turn that took place of crime in Panama city in three different areas which are burglary, car theft and robbery from 2010 to 2019. MMB5o
This line chart illustrates the turn that took place of crime in Panama city in three different areas which are burglary, car theft and robbery from 2010 to 2019. It is clear from the graph that the rate of crime of burglaries declined whereas car theft and robberies remained relatively stable. According to what is shown, the rate of crime in burglary in 2010 was around 3500, but in 2011 has fallen gradually unit reached in 2015 about 1000, after that continue increasing in 2019 approximately 1500. wilhe the robbery area stated slightly under 1000 in 2010-2013 after that continue declined gradually from 2013 to 2015 unit reached 500 than stay increase gradually and in the end It continued at the same level. In sharp contrast to this, the car theft was around 3000 until 2012, later in 2013 has fallen gradually, in 2017 rose slightly and become about 3000, and it continued to rise until 2019.
This line chart illustrates the turn that took place of crime in
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Panama city
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areas which are burglary, car theft and robbery from 2010 to 2019. It is
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from the graph that the rate of crime of burglaries declined whereas car theft and robberies remained
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in 2011 has fallen
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unit reached in 2015 about 1000, after that continue increasing in 2019 approximately 1500.
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wilhe
the robbery area stated
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under 1000 in 2010-2013 after that continue declined
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from 2013 to 2015 unit reached 500 than
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increase
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and in the
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It continued at the same level. In sharp contrast to this, the car theft was around 3000 until 2012, later in 2013 has fallen
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, in 2017 rose
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and become about 3000, and it continued to rise until 2019.
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IELTS academic This line chart illustrates the turn that took place of crime in Panama city in three different areas which are burglary, car theft and robbery from 2010 to 2019.

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