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This essay is dedicated to analyse the major reasons behind this phenomenon and in my view,it has several consequences.

This essay is dedicated to analyse the major reasons behind this phenomenon and in my view, it has several consequences. 3Wbyn
Needless to say, some people work hard while others prefer not to push themselves beyond a certain limit. This essay is dedicated to analyse the major reasons behind this phenomenon and in my view, it has several consequences. Out of all the reason, the cogent one is the cut throat competition. In other words, as far as employers are concerned, to achieve holistic development in every arena, employees work in tough circumstances. In order to live comfortable lifestyle, they give up their whole potential in their work field to fulfill their quest. Moreover, students in the phase of learning often get pressurise by their parents since there are limited seats in their dream institutions which encourage them to work harder to make their parents as well as their ambitions satisfied. To illustrate, the cut off's in entrance examinations has increased whereas reserved seats are limited which leads to huge competition. What is more, in my perspective, working hard has detrimental impacts on students in particular and workers at large. Firstly, employees face stressful conditions due to overthinking about their future in their career. This not only results in personal and professional life imbalance but also lead to low productivity. Secondly, work load on students adversely affect their mental health and cause psychosomatic issues. Apart from this, their involvement in other cognitive skills get hindered in long term. Therefore, if the smart work would be given the equal place as hard work, the better it is. To conclude, some people are more hardworking then others due to several reasons and I believe it is not practical in long term.
Needless to say,
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some
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people
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work
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hard
while others prefer not to push themselves beyond a certain limit. This essay
is dedicated
to
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analyse
the major reasons behind this phenomenon and in my view, it has several consequences. Out of all the reason, the cogent one is the
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cut throat
competition. In
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other
words, as far as employers
are concerned
, to achieve holistic development in every arena, employees
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in tough circumstances. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
comfortable lifestyle, they give up their whole potential in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
field to fulfill their quest.
Moreover
, students in the phase of learning
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often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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pressurise
by their parents since there
are limited
seats in their dream institutions which encourage them to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
harder to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their parents
as well
as their ambitions satisfied. To illustrate, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
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off's
in entrance examinations has increased whereas reserved seats
are limited
which leads to huge competition.
What is more
, in my perspective, working
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
has detrimental impacts on students
in particular
and workers at large.
Firstly
, employees face stressful conditions due to overthinking about their future in their career. This not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
results in personal and professional life imbalance
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but
also
lead to low productivity.
Secondly
,
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work
load on students
adversely
affect their mental health and cause psychosomatic issues. Apart from this, their involvement in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
cognitive
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skills
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get
hindered in long term.
Therefore
, if the smart
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work
would be
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given
the equal place as
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hard
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work
, the better it is.
To conclude
,
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some
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people
are more hardworking
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then
others due to several reasons and I believe it is not practical in long term.
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IELTS academic This essay is dedicated to analyse the major reasons behind this phenomenon and in my view, it has several consequences.

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