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There are 3-line graphs compares three kinds of fast-food

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Look at the details, in 1970, the usage of Hamburger, Fish & Chip were lower than 100 times. Fish & Chip’s consumption are rose gradually to 150 times in 1980, and then boomed and reached a peak of 500 times in 1990. Similarly hamburger’s trend experienced a steady growth from 50 times to nearly 300 times in the end of given period. By contrast, as regards the times people using Pizza, starting at about 300 times in 1970. The figure decreased considerably to 200 times in 1980, finally, slight went up to approximately 210 times.
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IELTS academic There are 3-line graphs compares three kinds of fast-food

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
95 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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