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The two pie charts illustrate sources of electricity in the US during the last century. Write a report detailing the percentages and changes.

The two pie charts illustrate sources of electricity in the US during the last century. Write a report detailing the percentages and changes. ENyGL

The following pie charts illustrate some factual information about Us electricity sources between the year 1970 and 1984. Which show significant and varied percentages that depicts the general trend of diagram. As shown in the diagram, it refers to numerous distinguished rates in various categories. Looking at the chart, in the year 1970 the highest portion in Us electricity sources is the coal source it’s 46. 0%. The second highest percentage was allocated for Natural Gas its 24. 3% also there is a category approach from natural Gas it called Hydro - electric power it’s 16. 2%. In 1984 the Us electricity sources have increased for instance, Coal has reached to 55. 5% also the Natural Gas has decreased to 12. 3%. Overall, it can be noticed that this chart includes a lot of changes and differences; and it can be clearly seen that all of proportions increased in importance, while in both of year some of percentages have declined.

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 factual information about Us electricity You use this word too often, consider replacing it withorigincauseauthorityexpert
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 between the year 1970 and 1984. Which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 significant and varied percentages that depicts the general trend of diagram.

As shown in the diagram, it refers to numerous distinguished rates in various categories. Looking at the chart, in the year 1970 the highest portion in Us electricity You use this word too often, consider replacing it withorigincauseauthorityexpert
sources
 is the coal You use this word too often, consider replacing it withorigincauseauthorityexpert
source
 it’s 46. 0%. The second highest percentage was allocated
 for Natural Gas its 24. 3% also
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 electric power it’s 16. 2%. In 1984 Possible typo. Did you mean "the" or "Us"?theUs
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 electricity You use this word too often, consider replacing it withorigincauseauthorityexpert
sources
 have increased for instance
, Coal has reached to 55. 5% also
 the Natural Gas has decreased to 12. 3%.

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a lot of
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changes
 and differences; and it can be clearly
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seen
 that Consider using "all proportions" or "all of the proportions".all proportionsall of the proportions
all of proportions
 increased in importance, while in both of year After 'some of', you should use 'the' ("some of the percentages") or simply say "some percentages".some of the percentagessome percentages
some of percentages
 have declined. 