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The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in Canada in the two different years, 2005 and 2010.

The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in Canada in the two different years, 2005 and 2010. oREow
The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in Canada in the two different years, 2005 and 2010. Overall, the online sale of electronic item and home furnishing dropped, however, the craze for food and video games increased during the five years. To begin with, in 2005, the majority of online sales was accounted for electronics and appliance sector with 35%, however, this percentage had dropped to 30% by 2010.
The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across
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retail sectors in Canada in the two
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years, 2005 and 2010.

Overall
, the online sale of electronic item and home furnishing dropped,
however
, the craze for food and video games increased during the five years. To
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begin
with, in 2005, the majority of online sales
was accounted
for electronics and appliance sector with 35%,
however
, this percentage had dropped to 30% by 2010.
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IELTS academic The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in Canada in the two different years, 2005 and 2010.

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