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The two pie charts below compare employment patterns in Great Britain by sex in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts demonstrate the employment pattern between man and women in Great Britain in 2010. The professions categorized in six groups including craft, general works, other manual, managerial and professional jobs, clerical, and other non-manual jobs. In male chart, it can be seen that the most portion is related to managerial and professional jobs, which is near 40%, but in females, the most part is related to other manual professions which is 32%. The second portion of the female chart is referring to clerical and related jobs which is very close to manual jobs with 30%. Whereas in males, the second portion is related to manual jobs, which is indicate that, the rate of manual jobs in UK are very similar in man and women. The third part in two charts is really closed with 21% in males including craft or similar jobs, and with 22% managerial and professional jobs in females. The male’s chart includes other three remaining professions with about similar rate in none-manual and clerical jobs and general laborer at the end with 2%. The females chart includes other non-manual jobs with 11%, and craft jobs with 4. 5%, and 0. 5% of general laborer which are very small portion in both charts.
The two pie
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demonstrate the employment pattern between
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and women in Great Britain in 2010.

The professions categorized in six groups including craft, general works,
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other
manual, managerial and professional
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jobs
, clerical, and
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other
non-manual
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. In male
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, it can be
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that the most
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is
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related
to managerial and professional
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jobs
, which is near 40%,
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in
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females
, the most part is
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to
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other
manual professions which is 32%. The second
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of the
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female
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is referring to clerical and
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related
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jobs
which is
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close to manual
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with 30%. Whereas in
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, the second
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is
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to manual
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, which is
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that, the rate of manual
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in UK are
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similar in
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and women. The third part in two
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is
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closed with 21% in
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including craft or similar
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, and with 22% managerial and professional
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in
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. The male’s
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includes
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three remaining professions with about similar rate in none-manual and clerical
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and general laborer at the
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with 2%.

The
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females
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includes
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non-manual
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with 11%, and craft
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with 4. 5%, and 0. 5% of general laborer which are
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small
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IELTS academic The two pie charts below compare employment patterns in Great Britain by sex in 2010.

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