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The two maps illustrate the changes of school campus from 1985 to 2012

The two maps illustrate the changes of school campus from 1985 to 2012 q6eAX
The two pictures illustrate the various changes are taken place around the school campus between 1985 and 2012. Looking at two maps, it is immediately obvious that the amount of student has the significantly increase from 1500 to 2300 student over the given period. Moreover, the most striking change is the playing field where is smaller more many construction purpose in 2012. In 2012, the library is demolished to make a way for the computer room, and the car park also be destroyed for planting a lots of tree in the middle of school campus. The playing are cut down a huge part of the left side; where the biggest classrooms, swimming pool and fitness club are built up for the higher education facilities. In the right side, classroom block still be remained; however, it is upgraded one more storeys at all. In the middle field of classroom and playing field, there are some classrooms are constructed which is supplied for a larger number of student in 2012. Furthermore, the office and car park in the top of the campus are kept in the same place and size over the given period.
The two pictures illustrate the various
changes
are taken
place around the school campus between 1985 and 2012.

Looking at two maps, it is immediately obvious that the amount of student has the
significantly
increase from 1500 to 2300
student
over the
given
period.
Moreover
, the most striking
change
is the playing field where is smaller more
many
construction purpose in 2012.

In 2012, the library
is demolished
to
make
a way for the computer room, and the car park
also
be
destroyed
for planting
a lots
of tree in the middle of school campus. The playing are
cut
down a huge part of the
left
side; where the biggest classrooms, swimming pool and fitness club
are built
up for the higher education facilities.
In the right side
, classroom block
still
be remained
;
however
, it
is upgraded
one more
storeys
at all. In the middle field of classroom and playing field, there are
some
classrooms
are constructed
which
is supplied
for a larger number of student in 2012.
Furthermore
, the office and car park in the top of the campus are
kept
in the same place and size over the
given
period.
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IELTS academic The two maps illustrate the changes of school campus from 1985 to 2012

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3 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
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