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The two maps compare how residents accessed a hospital in the city in two different years, 2007 and 2010.

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The two maps compare how residents accessed a hospital in the city in two different years, 2007 and 2010. It is evident that the most obvious changes were intersection development and the improvement of the bus station. As can be seen from the graphs, two roundabouts were built on Hospital Road to reduce the number of traffic accidents. For more particular information, the first one was constructed at the four-way junction between city and hospital road, while the second one was located in the three-way intersection of the ring road and the hospital road. In addition, a variation of bus stops along this main street were replaced and upgraded to a large station for patients and their families in the west. On the opposite side, the old public car park was turned to be used by staff only. Another change in the map was the position of that parking was moved to the right of the hospital. Regarding the remaining data, various features were similar in those two years. For example, the hospital was still north of the hospital road and surrounded by a street called ring road. Moreover, local authorities did not seem to improve those streets or widen them.
The two maps compare how residents accessed a
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hospital
in the city in two
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different
years, 2007 and 2010.

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changes
were intersection development and the improvement of the bus station.

As can be
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seen
from the graphs, two roundabouts
were built
on
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Hospital
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Road
to
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reduce
the number of traffic accidents. For more particular information, the
first
one
was constructed
at the four-way junction between city and
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hospital
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road
, while the second one
was located
in the three-way intersection of the ring
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road
and the
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hospital
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road
.
In addition
, a variation of bus
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stops
along this main street
were replaced
and upgraded to a large station for patients and their families in the west. On the opposite side, the
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old
public car park
was turned
to be
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used
by staff
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only
. Another
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change
in the map was the position of that parking was
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moved
to the right of the hospital.

Regarding the remaining data, various features were similar in those two years.
For example
, the
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hospital
was
still
north of the
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hospital
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road
and surrounded by a street called ring
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road
.
Moreover
, local authorities did not seem to
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improve
those streets or widen them.
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