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The graph below show the percentage of people using public transport and people using only private cars in five cities in Australia from 2000 to 2010. Summarise the informstion by selecting and reportingthe main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below show the percentage of people using public transport and people using only private cars in five cities in Australia from 2000 to 2010. Summarise the informstion by selecting and reportingthe main features and make comparisons where relevant. NyBRq
The line graph compare the proportion of utilization of public transport and own cars of masses in the cities of the nation of Australia in a decade. Calibration of data were measured in percentage%. Overall, In Sydney, the general trend articulate the chart in which show that the private vehicles were more used in 2010 as compared to initiall stage. While the usage of public transport decrease in the year of 2010. Whereas, both the mean of transportation were consumed in less number by the individuals of melbourne in the whole period. In the most significant term of melbourne represent that composition of public transport in the starting was approximately one-fifth of entire. However it was rose on the peak of point at nearly 23% and then fell down at 18% in 2010. Whereas, In 2000, the people were using their own vehicles fourth-fifth of total and after 10 years a dramatically change come and it rose at 90%. Furthermore, the people of melbourne use public vehicle merely at 5% and then it bottom down at nearly 5%. Although, it was noticed that the public transportation of Adelaide was intersect at 10% with the city of canberra
The line graph compare the proportion of utilization of
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cars of masses in the cities of the nation of Australia in a decade. Calibration of data
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transport decrease in the year of 2010. Whereas, both the mean of transportation
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melbourne
in the whole period.

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melbourne
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transport in the starting was approximately one-fifth of entire.
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nearly
23% and then fell down at 18% in 2010. Whereas, In 2000, the
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and it rose at 90%.

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transportation of Adelaide was
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IELTS academic The graph below show the percentage of people using public transport and people using only private cars in five cities in Australia from 2000 to 2010. Summarise the informstion by selecting and reportingthe main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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