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The two maps below show the Sunny Island before and after its commercialization.

The two maps below show the Sunny Island before and after its commercialization. mWY2n
The maps compare a sunny island from 1977 to 2017, by adding new amenities for the past 20 years. Overall, many facilities have been constructed for people, including hotels, restaurants, fishing bay, etc. And those were built with little effect on the natural resources. Before the facilities were constructed, there was only forest and houses on this island and most of the places were vacant. On this island, many provisions have been made including a fish bay in the north and south region of the island. restaurants are in the north and east part of the island. Moreover, restaurants in the eastern part of the island are constructed without cutting down the forest trees. On the other hand, hotels were established in the western and eastern part of the island as well as in the center portion of the island. While constructing the hotel, forests in the western region were destructed for establishment purposes. However, the forest in the eastern region of an island remains unruffled.
The maps compare a sunny
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from 1977 to 2017, by adding new amenities for the past 20 years.

Overall
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facilities have
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people
, including hotels, restaurants, fishing bay, etc. And those
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little
effect on the natural resources.

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Before
the facilities
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and
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houses
on this
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island
and most of the places were vacant. On this
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,
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many
provisions have
been made
including a fish bay in the north and south region of the
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restaurants
are in the north and east part of the
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island
.
Moreover
, restaurants in the eastern part of the
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island
are constructed
without cutting down the
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forest
trees.

On the other hand
, hotels
were established
in the western and eastern part of the
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island
as well
as in the center portion of the
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island
. While constructing the hotel,
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forests
in the western region
were destructed
for establishment purposes.
However
, the
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in the eastern region of an
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island
remains unruffled.
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