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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. qqgD
The maps illustrate the path of the road towards city hospital in two years 2007 and 2010. Overall, it is clear that the place for the parking of staff and public were separated, and bus stop place had changed. Moreover, there was the addition of roundabouts. The most noticeable change is that there was a bus stop on either side of the hospital road in 2007 which was shifted towards the left side of the hospital road in 2010. Moreover, there used to be one parking facility for staff and the public in 2007, but it was separated in 2010. A car parking place for the public was erected on the right side of the city hospital by 2010. Besides, a roundabout has appeared near the city road in 2010 which was not there in 2007. Furthermore, there was the ring road beside the city hospital which was remained the same in both years.
The maps illustrate the path of the
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road
towards city
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hospital
in two years 2007 and 2010.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the place for the parking of staff and public
were separated
, and bus
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stop
place had
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changed
.
Moreover
, there was the addition of roundabouts.

The most noticeable
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change
is that there was a bus
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stop
on either side of the
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hospital
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road
in 2007 which
was shifted
towards the
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left
side of the
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hospital
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road
in 2010.
Moreover
, there
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used
to be one parking facility for staff and the public in 2007,
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but
it
was separated
in 2010. A car parking place for the public
was erected
on the right side of the city
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hospital
by 2010.

Besides
, a roundabout has appeared near the city
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road
in 2010 which was not there in 2007.
Furthermore
, there was the ring
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road
beside the city
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hospital
which
was remained
the same in both years.

IELTS academic The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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