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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. XGPBq
The two maps illustrate the information about road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. The both maps indicates the direction of reached the hospital in 2007 and in 2010. The first map represent the road access. In 2007, city hospital road access is little bit bad. First we see east to west their is the city road front of the hospital road. On the left side to the hospital road, there is the bus stop near the hospital. And the right side on the road, we saw a parking area of the hospital for staff and public. Then go straight to the hospital road then we reached on the city hospital. This direction in 2007. In the north side of hospital, there was a ring road. The second map again indicate the road access. In 2010, after the construction of city hospital road. We go again east to west on city road, after few minutes there is the roundabout. Then we turn right on the hospital road. On the hospital road same again in the left side a bus station and right the car parking area. Then go straight on the hospital road then cross the roundabout again go straight and reached on city hospital. There was a ring road in the north side again.
The two
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to a city
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hospital
in 2007 and in 2010. The both
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indicates the direction of reached the
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hospital
in 2007 and in 2010.

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. In 2007, city
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front of the
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. On the
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, there is the bus
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. And the right side on the
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, we
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a parking area of the
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for staff and public. Then go straight to the
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then we reached on the city
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. This direction in 2007. In the north side of
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, there was a ring road.

The second
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. In 2010, after the construction of city
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. We go
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east to west on city
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, after few minutes there is the roundabout. Then we turn right on the
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. On the
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side a bus station and right the car parking area. Then go straight on the
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then cross the roundabout
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go straight and reached on city
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. There was a ring
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in the north side
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IELTS academic The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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