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The line chart indicates the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

The line chart indicates the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014. 566WB
The line chart indicates the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014. Overall, it can be seen that all types of jam experienced an upward trend in sales except for plum during the given years. In addition, strawberry remained the most popular kind with the highest figure in most of the period. Starting at 3. 2 million units in 2009, the sales of strawberry quickly increased and reached a peak of 7 million at the end of the period. Similarly, the figures for raspberry and grape witnessed the same pattern in which their sales grew considerably and stood at 5. 5 million and 4. 5 million respectively in 2014. Moving on, 2. 5 million units of plum was sold in 2009. However, this number gradually dropped throughout the period and finally, no unit was recorded in 2014. Regarding cherry, its sales saw a fluctuation around 2 million in the first four years. Then, the figure increased slightly before dropping to 2. 5 million in 2014.
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of five
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different
kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

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, it can be
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seen
that all types of jam experienced an upward trend in
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sales
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except for
plum during the
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given
years.
In addition
, strawberry remained the most popular kind with the highest figure in most of the period.

Starting at 3. 2
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million
units in 2009, the
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sales
of strawberry
quickly
increased and reached a peak of 7
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million
at the
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end
of the period.
Similarly
, the figures for raspberry and grape witnessed the same pattern in which their
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sales
grew
considerably
and stood at 5. 5
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million
and 4. 5
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million
respectively
in 2014.

Moving on, 2. 5
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million
units of plum
was sold
in 2009.
However
, this number
gradually
dropped throughout the period and
finally
, no unit
was recorded
in 2014. Regarding cherry, its
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sales
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saw
a fluctuation around 2
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million
in the
first
four years. Then, the figure increased
slightly
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before
dropping to 2. 5
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million
in 2014.

IELTS academic The line chart indicates the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

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