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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. KJPk
The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of carbonated drinks by using the five different stages. Analyzing the details, the process commences from the water cleaning process. In this process, raw water passed through a filter and then went into the water softener. Here, all impurities in water are cleaned and add some chemicals in it. After that, this mixture passed from the pump. In the second stage of the process, this mixture goes into the electric heaters, and from that, it would go into the cooling pipe for cooling. Next, add some amount of carbon dioxide to this mixture. In the following stage, the mixture went into the mixing tank. The mixing tank has coloring agents, syrup as well as flavoring agents. These three ingredients added to this mixture: went to filter again for another purification. Eventually, in the four-step, it filled in bottles and cans then packed in the box. Finally, by using transport carbonated drinks sent to the supermarket. Overall, it can be seen that this process has some various mechanical steps from producing carbonated beverages to adding chemicals to packaging.
The diagram illustrates the manufacturing
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of carbonated drinks by using the five
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different
stages.

Analyzing the
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details
, the
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commences from the
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water
cleaning
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process
. In this
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process
, raw
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water
passed through a filter and then went into the
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water
softener. Here, all impurities in
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water
are cleaned
and
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add
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some
chemicals in it. After that, this
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mixture
passed from the pump.

In the second stage of the
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, this
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mixture
goes into the electric heaters, and from that, it would go into the cooling pipe for cooling.
Next
,
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add
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some
amount of carbon dioxide to this
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mixture
. In the following stage, the
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mixture
went into the mixing tank. The mixing tank has coloring agents, syrup
as well
as flavoring agents. These three ingredients
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added
to this
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mixture
: went to filter again for another purification.

Eventually
, in the four-step, it filled in bottles and cans then packed in the box.
Finally
, by using transport carbonated drinks
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sent
to the supermarket.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that this
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process
has
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various mechanical steps from producing carbonated beverages to adding chemicals to packaging.
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IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

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5 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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