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The two line graphs illustrate the number of regional and international students who are enrolled in Australian universities throughout ten years.

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The two line graphs illustrate the number of regional and international students who are enrolled in Australian universities throughout ten years. It depicts the figure of students who are about to begin their study in the institutions along with the total number. Overall, it is noticeable that both the groups showed fluctuating numbers. On comparison, it is clear that the proportion of local students is higher than that of foreign ones, To begin with, the figure of people from overseas who are about to commence their courses showed an upward trend over nine years and from 2009 to 2010, their number remained almost stable. However, in case of local students, a rise in their number is seen in first year. After that, the proportion started declining slowly till 2006. For two years, the curve is in upward direction, meanwhile after that it shifts downward. Moving ahead to the total number of students, the trajectory of the graph for international ones is in inclining order whereas that of regional ones depicted varying trend. It is seen to upsurge in first seven years followed by stability in their number in rest of the years.
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of regional and international
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in Australian universities throughout ten years. It depicts the figure of
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students
who are about to
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their study in the institutions along with the total number.

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fluctuating
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numbers
. On comparison, it is
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that the proportion of local
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students
is higher than that of foreign ones,

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with, the figure of
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from overseas who are about to commence their courses
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showed
an upward trend over nine years and from 2009 to 2010, their
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remained almost stable.
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students
, a rise in their
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is
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in
first
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. After that, the proportion
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till 2006. For two years, the curve is in upward direction, meanwhile after that it shifts downward.

Moving ahead to the total
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, the trajectory of the graph for international ones is in inclining order whereas that of regional ones depicted varying trend. It is
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seen
to upsurge in
first
seven years followed by stability in their
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in rest of the years.
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IELTS academic The two line graphs illustrate the number of regional and international students who are enrolled in Australian universities throughout ten years.

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