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The two diagrams describe the main parts and working of the hot air balloon.write report for university.

The two diagrams describe the main parts and working of the hot air balloon. write report for university. VQykm
The given diagrams illustrate the working and main parts of the hot air balloon. Commencing with first diagram which is a ascending. At the bottom of the balloon there is a gas cylinder tank on which basket is placed for standing or sitting of the people. There is a valve chord attached from the top side of valve and it is in the hand of the passengers When gas cylinder tank is on then valve closed and due to on burners the hot air balloon starts moving upward. On the other hand, in a descending the construction of the hot air balloon is same but in this the burner is off then valve chord starts to open. so hot air balloon comes downward. Also, Valve chord thread is in the hand of the passengers which in the in the basket. Overall, the process of ascending and descending depends upon the closing and opening of a valve.
The
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diagrams illustrate the working and main parts of the hot
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air
balloon.

Commencing with
first
diagram which is
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a
ascending. At the bottom of the
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balloon
there is a gas cylinder tank on which basket
is placed
for standing or sitting of the
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people
. There is a
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valve
chord attached from the top side of
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valve
and it is in the hand of the passengers When gas cylinder tank is on then
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valve
closed and due to on burners the hot
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air
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balloon
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starts
moving upward.
On the other hand
, in a descending the construction of the hot
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air
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balloon
is same
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but
in this the burner is off then
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valve
chord
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starts
to open.
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so
hot
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air
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balloon
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comes
downward.
Also
,
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Valve
chord thread is in the hand of the passengers which
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in the in the
basket.

Overall
, the process of ascending and descending depends upon the closing and opening of a
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valve
.
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IELTS academic The two diagrams describe the main parts and working of the hot air balloon. write report for university.

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6.0
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