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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000..

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. . wdjY
The line graph depicts the information of eaten of fast food (pizza, Fish, and hamburgers)by Australian youth from the year 1975 to 2000overall, It can be seen that, the the two food items were rapidly increased throughout the period i. e pizza and hamburgers whereas fish and chips was fallen continuously over the period. The data are calliberated in numbers To begin with, the fish and chips has the highest in the year 1975(100)then after it goes down slowlyin 1980which 80 times and from the year 1985 the number of boys and girls who eat fish and chips was started to go down continuously and reached nearly 35in 2000. Therefore, the numbers of teenagers in Australianwho eat fish and chips has fell down compare to two others fast food items(pizza and hamburger). On the other hand, in the year 1975 the number of teenagers who ate both items pizza and hamburgers have the approximately the same numbers which is 10. Furthermore, thr numbers of youth who taken pizza has started to rise and reached 100 in the year 2000 compare to hamburgers. Likewise, hamburgers instanlygrow continuously and reached 80 in the year 1995 and remain stable throughout the period.
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1975 to 2000overall, It can be
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1985 the
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