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The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular

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The pie charts provide data on the expenditure of a school in the UK in three different years. It is clear that in 1981, teachers salaries represented the largest proportion of the school’s budget (40%). The figure increased to 50% in 1991, but declined by 5% in the last year. The percentage of spending in other workers salaries also decreased throughout the 20-year period, from just under 30% in 1981 to a mere 15% in 2001. According to their figures, spending on insurance made up a small minority of the total. It stood at 2% in 1981 and reached 8% in 2001. By contrast, the percentages for resources and furniture fluctuated. The figure for resources was highest in 1991, at 20%, and the proportion of spending on furniture and equipment reached a peak in 2001 at less than a quarter(23%). Overall, while teachers salaries accounted for the largest proportion of the schools spending, insurance remained the smallest cost in all three years.
The pie charts provide data on the expenditure of a school in the UK in three
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that in 1981, teachers salaries represented the largest proportion of the school’s budget (40%). The figure increased to 50% in 1991,
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declined by 5% in the last year. The percentage of
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in other workers salaries
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under 30% in 1981 to a mere 15% in 2001.

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on insurance made up a
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minority of the total. It stood at 2% in 1981 and reached 8% in 2001. By contrast, the percentages for resources and furniture fluctuated. The figure for resources was highest in 1991, at 20%, and the proportion of
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on furniture and equipment reached a peak in 2001 at less than a quarter(23%).

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, while teachers salaries accounted for the largest proportion of the schools
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, insurance remained the smallest cost in all three years.

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